Talk:Nick Kerbawy

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Gonzo fan2007 in topic GA Review

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk23:53, 1 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

Moved to mainspace by BeanieFan11 (talk). Self-nominated at 18:18, 15 September 2022 (UTC).Reply

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 02:42, 23 August 2023 (UTC)Reply


I'll review this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 02:42, 23 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • Recommend adding in that he was a three-time NFL champion with the Lions in the lead.

Biography

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  • He also attended Michigan Normal College (now known as Eastern Michigan University), and played tennis there, winning the 1935 championship, although he did not receive the trophy until 1949. -> He also attended Michigan Normal College (now known as Eastern Michigan University) where he won the 1935 tennis championship, although he did not receive the trophy until 1949.
  • In c. June 1948 if it actually happened in June 1948, you don't need the circa. If it was around that time, I would recommend rewording to something more general, like "In the middle of 1948"
  • After McMillin was fired in the 1951 season -> during the 1951 season
  • best teams in the 1950s: no need for the colon, just end with a period and start the new sentence.
  • championship in 17 years, and the second time overall. no comma needed
  • However, Kerbawy helped build the Lions back up in the next season, and helped them win nine games and place second in their conference, narrowly missing the playoffs by a half-game the repetition of "help" is clunky. Maybe next season; the team won nine games and placed second in their conference?
  • Kerbawy was fired from his positions after just three seasons, in January 1961. -> Kerbawy was fired from his positions in January 1961 after just three seasons

References

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  • Ref #25 needs an access-date
  • Spot checks:
    • Ref #1 looks good.
    • Ref #3 looks good.
    • Ref #3 and 4 are the same article, printed in different newspapers. Same UPI article published the same day. Just choose one and delete the other.
    • Ref #7 looks good.
    • Ref #13 looks good.
    • Ref #18 looks good.
    • Ref #24 looks good.
    • Ref #28 looks good.

Images

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  • Image is non-free, but rationale looks good.

Nice work, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 18:52, 23 August 2023 (UTC)Reply

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