- By 1987, former Pacific Arts Video Distribution (a.k.a. Pacific Arts Video Classics) president Robert Fread had quit, who had been at the video arm since the early 1980s, and he would be replaced as president by George Steele, who had been at the home video arm since 1984, and when owner Michael Nesmith was soliciting bids for a sale portion of the Pacific Arts video arm, which involved lawyers were Paramount Home Video and Nelson Entertainment.
In addition to its syntax that eventually wanderers off to parts unknown, this remarkably overwritten sentence is a glowing example of the ineffectiveness and hazards of overusing past perfect ("he had") and future perfect ("he would") verb tenses, a fundamentally amateur writing mistake which, I fear, is rife here at WP.
In addition to introducing unnecessary verbosity, it requires the reader to maintain notions of relative past, present and future within the context of past events. (Imagine a wine label that describes the vintner's intentions before they produced the wine, and how they imagined they'd feel once they'd produced it—and yet, sadly, I'm sure such labels exist.)
I don't have time to even start figuring out how to fix this—but my fondness for WP compels me to mention it in case someone else who cares and does have the time wants to wade into it. 2001:569:72B0:D900:CC8D:24ED:4709:9C61 (talk) 01:28, 10 August 2024 (UTC)Reply
