Talk:Oriana Skylar Mastro

Latest comment: 4 months ago by Riley1012 in topic GA Review

Removing 'notability guideline for academics' tag

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An earlier editor added a tag suggesting that the article may not meet WP:ACADEMIC. I believe the sources cited currently do demonstrate the subject's notability, and thus the tag should be removed. W9793 (talk) 01:11, 6 October 2023 (UTC)Reply

Did you know nomination

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The result was: rejected by reviewer, closed by AirshipJungleman29 talk 13:16, 22 January 2024 (UTC)Reply

 
US political scientist and army officer Oriana S. Mastro in uniform

5x expanded by W9793 (talk). Self-nominated at 06:05, 6 December 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Oriana Skylar Mastro; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.Reply


GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Oriana Skylar Mastro/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: W9793 (talk · contribs) 19:05, 9 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

Reviewer: Riley1012 (talk · contribs) 12:51, 9 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

Hello! I will complete a review within one week. -Riley1012 (talk) 12:51, 9 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

1. Well-written

  • Per MOS:LEAD, information that is cited in the body of the article doesn't need a citation in the lead
  • Add her current roles at Stanford and AEI (mentioned in the lead) to the body
  • Add wikilink in the lead to Academic tenure
  • Mastro holds a BA (2006) in East Asian Studies from Stanford University and a MA (2009) and PhD (2013) in politics from Princeton University. Spell out these acronyms and add wikilinks.
  • In 2008, while a doctoral student at Princeton, Mastro met with then deputy commander of the then U.S. Pacific Command (now U.S. Indo-Pacific Command, USINDOPACOM) Lt. Gen. Dan P. Leaf at a conference where she was invited to present research she and her colleagues at Carnegie's China program conducted earlier about the "military balance of power across the Taiwan Strait." This is a lengthy sentence, consider breaking it up.
  • Leaf suggested that she enlist into the U.S. military... change to "enlist in the U.S. military"
  • ...Mastro enlisted in the U.S. Air Force in fall 2008... change to "in the fall of 2008"

2. Verifiable

  • Ref. 3 and 5 should not be used per WP:SELFPUB
  • Per Copyvio check, reword the following phrases: continues to serve in the US Air Force Reserve as a strategic planner at the US Indo-Pacific Command. and Mastro's research focuses on the Chinese military, Asia-Pacific security, war termination, and coercive diplomacy. (which also seems to be copied from the self-published source)
  • From 2006 to 2007, Mastro was selected as a junior fellow for the Carnegie Endowment for International Peace's China program. In 2008, she was part of the summer associate program at the RAND Corporation. Source?
  • In 2013, Mastro was appointed assistant professor of security studies at Georgetown's Edmund A. Walsh School of Foreign Service, and in 2020, she was appointed a center fellow at Stanford's Freeman Spogli Institute for International Studies. Source?
  • I've spot checked all the sources that weren't links to her publications:
  • Source 2 does not mention her non-resident senior fellow status (you could use one of her articles for AEI [ex] instead since her role is listed in the sidebar on those)
  • Also, did ref. 2 use to include a biography (if so, add an archived version)? I'm not seeing any of the information attributed to this source.
  • Ref. 7 is a dead link, add an archived link

3. Broad

  • Is there any more information you could add to the education section? Any information about her life before academia (hometown, etc.)?
    ex: source 4 mentions she studied Mandarin during her undergrad at Stanford, I would add that.
  • It would be nice to have a DOB or even a birth year, if you could find it.

4. Neutral
The article is neutral.

5. Stable
The article is stable, and there are no ongoing disputes.

6. Illustrated
The one photo is in the public domain and has a relevant caption.

@W9793: There's a lot of information here that cannot be verified with the provided sources. Please add more citations, and I'll take another look. -Riley1012 (talk) 21:58, 10 June 2024 (UTC)Reply

@Riley1012 - Thanks for reviewing. I will attempt to address the issues raised within the next few days. W9793 (talk) 02:32, 13 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
Hi @Riley1012 - I've fixed most issues and tried to follow your suggestions for improving prose - Please let me know if you think any further revision is needed. Thanks. W9793 (talk) 02:47, 15 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
@W9793: Hi, I'm on vacation. I'll take a look on Wednesday or Thursday, sorry for the delay. Riley1012 (talk) 10:48, 16 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Riley1012 No problem - thanks for the note & hope you enjoy your vacation! W9793 (talk) 16:51, 16 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
@W9793: Okay, much better now. I made a minor change to a duplicate reference you had, and I am fine with passing this. -Riley1012 (talk) 23:26, 19 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
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