Talk:Tommy James (American football)
Latest comment: 11 years ago by Batard0 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:11, 19 July 2013 (UTC)
Just want to say thanks for picking this up and that I'm here and ready to address any issues and answer any queries. --Batard0 (talk) 18:30, 19 July 2013 (UTC)
Comments
- "1950s. James was born" -> "1950s. He was born"
- Done. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- " he starred as a back" not sure on the neutrality of saying "starred".
- Changed to "played." --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- "he followed Brown to Ohio State, where he played as" second "he", strictly speaking it's unclear whether it's James or Brown you're referring to here.
- Rephrased to eliminate the second use of "he." --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- "He went to grammar" He attended?
- Fixed.--Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- Consider linking grammar school.
- Linked.--Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- Consider linking touchdown. I know it's obvious to you but it's not obvious to all international readers.
- Linked.--Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- I would expect win-loss to use an en-dash, just like the record itself does!
- Done.--Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- "James had an interception" do you mean he "made" one or "suffered" one?
- Made one. Changed. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- "as he got older" not keen on this phrase, perhaps "as an older player" or something?
- Put in "later in his career". --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- What does "on waivers" mean?
- It means you allow other teams to employ him on the same contractual terms as you signed him on. If a player "clears waivers" it means no team wanted to pick up the contract, and at that point he's free to make a new contract with any team. I linked it and briefly described it. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- Ref 17 title could use an en-dash.
- Fixed. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
The Rambling Man (talk) 17:17, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
GA criteria
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- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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- a (major aspects): b (focused):
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- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
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- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
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- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
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A few minor prose issues, otherwise no problems here, I'll place it on hold for a week until I'm notified that the article has been updated. Cheers. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:17, 21 July 2013 (UTC)
- All issues above are addressed, I believe, but I'm happy to make any additional adjustments. Thanks, and this certainly makes the article better. --Batard0 (talk) 19:04, 21 July 2013 (UTC)