Talk:Siege of Smolensk (1632–1633)

Latest comment: 12 years ago by GreatOrangePumpkin in topic GA Review
Good articleSiege of Smolensk (1632–1633) has been listed as one of the Warfare good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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June 21, 2012Good article nomineeListed

GA Review

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 16:21, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    Should "king" be capitalicized? Sounds like a proper noun to me.
    Standardized to non-capitalized version. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    "ending the last Russo-Polish War.[1]" - not sure if I understand correctly, but there were many more Russia-Polish wars. Maybe remove "last" to avoid this confusion or replace with "latest"
    Good point, fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    "comprised part of Shein's army.[4]" - I would add "a" behind "comprised" for flow
    Good point, fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    "force of about 1,500 strong" - not sure if the "strong" is correct; is this standard in war-related articles?
    I am not sure myself, I thought I saw it used in some other articles; if you would like to change it, go ahead. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    delink "pospolite ruszenie" in the second mention
    "Cossack" should be linked here and the one in the second paragraph of the second section should be delinked
    Done. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    Can you integrate "Shein's begun the siege of Smolensk on 28 October.[6]" into the next section?
    Done. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    Should "siege" be capitalicized?
    I think it can, some articles do it for the Battle of, and it is the same with Siege of. But I just checked and I don't see much capitalization of this word in the article? --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    Why the bracket "Tymosz (Timofiy) Orendarenko"?
    Changed to Ukrainian spelling. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    This and the other sections are ok
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    Non-English sources should be labelled as such
    Done. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    Wrong formatting of Ref 7
    ISBN error fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    Several sources should be labelled as "pp" instead of "p"
    Fixed. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall: Great article, just needs a few fixes before passing. --GoPTCN 16:52, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    Pass/Fail:  
    Thanks, I addressed the raised issues. Is there anything I missed? --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply
    Thanks for the corrections. I just ignore this "strong" for now :) Overall very interesting, good work! :)--GoPTCN 18:31, 21 June 2012 (UTC)Reply