Talk:Seasons (Ayumi Hamasaki song)
Latest comment: 8 years ago by CaliforniaDreamsFan in topic GA Review
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Swear!
editSwea! this is the most beautiful song in my life!! I listen to this song everyday. No words can describe... --back to goguryeo 09:21, 5 October 2007 (UTC)
GA Review
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- This review is transcluded from Talk:Seasons (Ayumi Hamasaki song)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 01:46, 3 April 2016 (UTC)
Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.
Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 01:46, 3 April 2016 (UTC)
Infobox
edit- The caption isn't needed since it's the same on all formats
Lead
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edit- I would add "single" before trilogy so readers aren't confused
Paragraph 2
edit- You list "J-pop" in the infobox, but "Japanese pop" in the lead, so make both of them the same please
- Songwriting is one word
- Change to "...making it Hamasaki's best selling single."
Paragraph 3
edit- Nada
Background and release
editParagraph 1
edit- The hidden text isn't necessary here; if you find it necessary, I would avoid shouting
- Remove the "s" after seconds in the audio sample description
Paragraph 2
edit- I would switch around this paragraph and the first one; I don't know, it flows better in my opinion–what are your thoughts on this?
- Instead of "describes Hamasaki's future", I would say "predicts Hamasaki's future"
Paragraph 3
edit- "making videos" → "making-of videos"
- Change to "The CD and digital cover sleeve have an image" please
Critical reception
edit- Again, songwriting is one word
- The third sentence uses the word "singled" but I'm not sure what it's trying to say/what it means
- 100% of the votes? Are you sure? Does that mean every person who voted picked this song?
Commercial performance
edit- Add a topic sentence stating that "Seasons" was a success please
- Remove "at" after "Vogue/Far Away/Seasons" reached..."
- The third and second to last sentence should use a semicolon to separate instead of a period (full stop)
Music video
editParagraph 1
edit- Outtake is one word
Synopsis
edit- Superimposed is also one word
- Change "with a video of two children" to "with a scene of two children" to reduce the amount of "videos" in that sentence
Live performances and other appearances
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edit- Are there available links to any of the tours you mentioned in this paragraph?
Paragraph 2
edit- Same with above, are there any available links for the concert performances that you mentioned? Add if applicable please
- You can add the years to the concert tours in parentheses after the tour name please (I would highly recommend this, especially since some tours last over several years.)
Paragraph 3
edit- List the actual albums instead of saying "The list is:..." like you did in my other review comments from previous articles you nominated
Credits and personnel
edit- The first column (if odd) should have the extra bullet point
- I don't think "Avex Trax" needs to be included here, so if you remove it, it would also take care of the above problem/comment
Track listing
edit- Pluralize the title and add "formats" so it reads as "Track listings and formats"
Charts and certifications
editCertification
edit- What does it mean to be certified "Million"?
- If million is a certification, you need to pluralize the section subtitle to "Certifications"
References
edit- Like with the rest of my reviews, please double check that only one link is provided for each publisher/website/etc. Thanks!
End of GA Review:
editGreat work yet again! I will put it on hold so you can make any changes. Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 04:40, 16 April 2016 (UTC)
- @Carbrera: Done and dusted! CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 05:23, 18 April 2016 (UTC)