Talk:Heinz Schnabel and Harry Wappler escape attempt
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We have the guts of a good, albeit small, article here. My initial thoughts are that the structure is the area that requires the most improvement so I am going to do some suggestions around this aspect primarily along with a few other comments on things that have caught my eye. Detailed comments may follow once the structure has been sorted.
- Rather than the "Initial capture..." heading, I suggest "Background".
- What kind of aircraft was Schnabel flying? (presumably a 109 but should be stated for certainty if it can be sourced).
- The material on Wappler is disproportionate to Schabel and should be trimmed. Eg some of the details of the flight leading to his capture, names of his crew. The point being the first loss due to barrage balloons is interesting and should stay. Where does Harry come from?
- I think there should be a separate section for Shap Wells, with location information, when Schnable and Wappler arrived, maybe its size (in number of inmates). In the current Wappler section it is referred to as a hotel and given a number; this may need explaining. (I've done some googling, found this link which may be useful, see the bit about the U-Boat hotel.
- Sources - not sure why you have chapter titles in some citations, they don't seem necessary.