Talk:Typhoon Faye (1982)

GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 20:44, 22 May 2014 (UTC)

Hello User:Yellow Evan! I am going to follow our unofficial "nominate an article, review an article" rule here. Therefore, I will assess this article now. Unfortunately, I have to say that you are sorta backsliding on quality. However, I am not going to fail this article, unless the issues aren't fixed/addressed.--12george1 (talk) 20:44, 22 May 2014 (UTC)

• Wikilink landfall (meteorology) in the first sentence at the word "struck"
  • A strike technically is not a landfall. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Initially, land interaction with prevented significant development." - Land interaction with what?
  • The WPTC IRC room :P YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Thereafter, Faye began to steadily intensify, and attained typhoon intensity later that day" - You should probably change "intensify" to "strengthen", as "intensify" and "intensity" are pretty similar.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "On August 23, Typhoon Faye reached its peak intensity, which it would maintain for approximately 12 hours." - Don't use it/its more than once in a sentence. Btw, why is it important that a tropical cyclone maintained peak intensity for 12 hours? A lot of other tropical cyclones have done that. Just say "On August 23, Typhoon Faye reached its peak intensity with winds of [insert peak winds]."
  • Too nitpicky, sorry. Give users space. I changed the "it would" bit though. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Severe flooding was recorded, and 41 people lost their lives in the Philippines. More than 5,000 houses were damaged, and around 7,000 sought shelter. Overall, 18 were injured, 220,000 were listed homeless, and damage amounted to $9.6 million (1982 USD).[nb 1]" - This whole thing is bizarre and out of order. For example, what does 18 people being injured have to do with the 220,000 that were listed as homeless? I would suggest something like this: "Severe flooding was recorded. More than 5,000 houses were damaged, while about 220,000 people were left homeless. Further, 7,000 persons sought shelter. Throughout the islands, there was 41 deaths and 18 injuries, as well as $9.6 million (1982 USD) in damage.[nb 1]"
  • Did pretty much that. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "with dissipation as a tropical cyclone occurring on the afternoon of August 27. Despite this, Faye initially continued moving east-northeast before stalling that evening." - This needs to be fixed, because even I was confused at first about how Faye moved after dissipation. Also, it isn't unusual for the remnants of a system to keep moving. Re-word the second sentence to "The remnants of Faye initially continued moving east-northeast before stalling that evening. "
  • More or less done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• No impact in other countries?
  • Did it come near any countries? :P YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "Later that, the Philippine Atmospheric," - Missing a word
  • Whoops. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Tropical Storm Faye slowly tracked west-northwest while a subtropical ridge was situated near Hong Kong;" - A layman might be confused as to why it is important to know why a subtropical ridge was situated near Hong Kong. I think you should instead say, "Tropical Storm Faye slowly tracked west-northwest due to a subtropical ridge situated near Hong Kong;"
  • I put "since a" instead. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "land interaction and strong wind shear from Typhoon Ellis," - No need to wikilink wind shear twice
  • Good call, removed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Typhoon Faye originated from a westward moving weak area of disturbed weather located within the Philippine Sea in the middle of August." - Hyphenate "westward" and "moving", so "westward-moving". Also, wikilink Philippine Sea
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "At 0900 UTC, the JTWC upgraded Fay back to a typhoon, just a mere 27 hours after the agency discontinued watching Faye for the first time." - The first "Faye" is misspelled. Also replace one of them with something like "it", "the storm", "the typhoon" etc. It is bad enough that you use the word Faye in almost every sentence.
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "At 0600 UTC on August 31, the JTWC downgraded Faye to a tropical depression under the anticipation that Faye would dissipate within 24 to 48 hours." - Ditto about using Faye more than once in a sentence
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• The Impact section overall looks rather small. Isn't there any more impact?
  • This storm was nothing compared to most Philippine TC's. Sad, but it's true. Also, this is more of an MH kind of storm. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• Next to nothing is mentioned about flooding. The lede makes it seem like the primary cause of damage.
  • Not in the new version IMO. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• Correct me if I am wrong, but I count 43 deaths: 41 in the Philippines and 2 in Japan. So update the infobox?
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Three others perished due to fallen trees or homes." - Homes fell on people?!? :O Did you mean, homes collapsing?
  • The sentence was axed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Offshore Palawan, Faye capsized a boat, killing seven of 54 Vietnamese aboard." - Is there ethnicity really that important? :P
  • Cut. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "The remaining were rescued." - Merge this into the previous sentence
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "In Iba, the typhoon ripped the roofs off of 80% of the homes,[12] where 200,000 or 40% of Iba's 500,000 residents were homeless.[8]" - First, Iba redirects to a disambiguation page. Did you mean to wikilink to Iba, Zambales? The sentence itself is worded oddly. Maybe try this: "In Iba, the typhoon de-roofed 80% of the homes,[12] leaving 200,000 out of 500,000 residents homeless, which is 40% of the city's population.[8]"
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "Additionally, three people perished in Iba due to falling debris." - Is this the same as the 3 deaths from falling trees and homes. If so, this sentence is unnecessary.
  • Eh, cut the earlier about 3 dead due to fallen trees. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
• "sending 7,608 people to shelter churches," ---> "sending 7,608 people to seek shelter in churches,"
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• Possibly more stuff later--12george1 (talk) 20:44, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review GC. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:06, 22 May 2014 (UTC)
    • After most of the issues were fixed/addressed and I made a few edits myself, I have decided that I will pass this article. Congratulations, --12george1 (talk) 14:56, 23 May 2014 (UTC)

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