Talk:Tom Conlon

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Tom Conlon/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:24, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• If I didn't say it before, I should have done, link "footballer" to association football.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "Football League" link.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• Link Stevenage.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• Link Loan (sports).
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "his hometown club" any personal life e.g. the fact he was born near Stoke is in the infobox but not in the prose.
• Added birth info.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• Link scout.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "in a game against" in a game not really needed.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "the "Posh" first" similar comment to before. Either introduce every nickname after the first formal team name mention, or ditch them. This is particularly important for things like "Posh" and "Boro" when there's literally no link to the club names.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "2013–14 campaign" put "campaign" in the pipe.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "substitute's" link.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "2014–15 season" put "season" in the pipe. Check all subsequent "season"/"campaign" stuff.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "following season turned out to be Conlon's breakthrough season " quick repeat of season.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "an injury sustained" what sort?
• Changed it.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "Hertfordshire side's lead" most readers won't connect Stevenage to Hertfordshire.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "season, scoring twice, as" so he didn't score in any other game that season...
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "cruciate knee ligament injury" link.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "The 2017–18 season saw Conlon" overlinked.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "was a key member of the Vale's midfield" where is that in the source?
• Changed it.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• Link sent off.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• Link volley.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• Link free-kick.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• "win at Exeter City;[45]" overlinked.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• Spaced hyphens in titles of refs should be en-dashes.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
• Scorelines should use en-dashes not hyphens.
• Done.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

That's it for now. On hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 17:46, 17 March 2021 (UTC)

• • OK, I've addressed those concerns.EchetusXe 12:31, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Cool, looks fine. Promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:12, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 20:50, 5 April 2021 (UTC)

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• ... that Port Vale F.C. captain Tom Conlon's great-great grandfather played for the club over a century ago? Source: "Tom is actually the third player in the family to have turned out for the Vale. Her dad, Tom’s great-grandfather, was goalkeeper George Heppell who kept goal for the club, playing 213 games between 1937-1952. What’s more, his father-in-law, so Tom’s great-great grandfather, was Albert Pearson, the midfielder and forward who played 114 games for Vale either side of the First World War and also played for Liverpool." (Baggaley, Michael (16 March 2020). "Tom Conlon on family pride and his Port Vale history". Stoke Sentinel. Retrieved 16 March 2020.)

• Reviewed: Borromean rings

Improved to Good Article status by EchetusXe (talk). Self-nominated at 15:52, 18 March 2021 (UTC).

• as I reviewed the GAN this is a straightforward enough review for me, from the article's point of view. The only issue is that the hook is not explicitly mentioned in the article, you have Heppell = great-grandfather and Pearson = Heppell's father-in-law, so you're making that leap to Heppell = Conlon's great-great grandfather, but the "in-law" bit bothers me, I don't call my "father-in-law's father" my grandfather.... The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 10:11, 19 March 2021 (UTC)

Could say about his ancestor being five generations ago but I can't think of a pithy way of saying it like that. EchetusXe 11:58, 19 March 2021 (UTC)

Or just "his grandfather's father-in-law"? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 12:03, 19 March 2021 (UTC)

Okay that's fine yeah. EchetusXe 15:10, 19 March 2021 (UTC)

• ALT1 ... that Port Vale F.C. captain Tom Conlon's grandfather's father-in-law played for the club over a century ago?

ALT1 is good to go. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 16:05, 19 March 2021 (UTC)