Talk:Sean Morrison (footballer)

Latest comment: 4 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review

Eligibilty for Ireland edit

This news report confirms that Morrison is eligible for the Republic of Ireland - "Morrison qualifies with two Irish grandparents." GiantSnowman 20:29, 31 October 2012 (UTC)Reply

Sean Morrison has a personal Twitter account. He was asked if he was eligible for Ireland and said he wasn't. I don't have a Twitter account, but if someone could ask him and substantiate what I said, so as his Wikipedia page doesn't have false information, that would be great. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.44.243.44 (talk) 20:54, 31 October 2012 (UTC)Reply

He may have chosen not to represent Ireland - but the reliable source states that he is eligible if he wishes. GiantSnowman 20:59, 31 October 2012 (UTC)Reply

The Herald is to sports what The Weekly World News or the National Enquirer is to news, in terms of reliability. The man himself has stated that he is ineligible to represent ROI. He stated this on Twitter. Straight from the horses mouth. I don't have a Twitter account. If you or people like you are so concerned with sources, ask him yourselves. If his Wikipedia page has unreliable facts, it's no skin off my back. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.44.243.44 (talk) 23:47, 31 October 2012 (UTC)Reply

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Sean Morrison (footballer)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:44, 12 September 2019 (UTC)Reply


Comments

  • Not keen on the single-sentence opening para.
  • "spending ... spell" is repeated in consecutive sentences in the lead.
  • " club win promotion to the Championship after winning" win winning, perhaps "secure ... winning"?
  • "he made his Premier League debut for the side as they suffered relegation." this could be interpreted as he made his debut on the game they were relegated...
  • "Championship during the 2017–18 season." I would expect that "season" link to go to the Championship season, not Cardiff's season.
  • "Born in Plymouth, Devon, was a keen..." missing a name!
  • "he chose to give up athletics" always keen to tighten the prose, any need for "chose to" here?
  • "Morrison joined his hometown club Plymouth Argyle," add "in 2006" for temporal context.
  • "before being handed a squad" touch colloquial (and what does that really mean to non-experts? Would it be better to say that he was promoted into the first team squad?)
  • "in some first-team action" reads journalistic, why not "gain some first-team experience" (unless it's a quote I guess?)
  • "Swindon manager Maurice Malpas announced... " that sentence has a few too many run-ons for my liking.
  • "in a 2–0 victory" league, cup?
  • "led to ... led" in the same sentence, repetitive.
  • "In May 2009, Scottish side Celtic saw a joint bid..." I'm guessing the word "rejected" ought to be there?
  • "a release-clause" not sure this needs hyphenation.
  • "Having made no appearances" reads odd, and contrary to my "tightening" note above, I think "Having failed to make an appearance..." would read better.
  • "but,[30] " odd ref placement, put it at the end of the sentence...
  • "at Prenton Park[35] " again, never keen on this juxtaposition, wait until the end of the sentence, our readers can do that too.
  • " penalty in the play-off final penalty " you know what I'm going to say...
  • "keeping him at the club until 2016" not really, best to just stick with the length of the contract he signed...
  • QPR - now we both know what that means, but it's usual to put abbreviations after the first use of the expanded version...
  • "He finished the season sixteen appearances" missing "with".
  • And "season" is repeated in that sentence...
  • "an initial fee" any clues on add-ons as this phrase in isolation may confuse non-expert readers...?
  • "of Club Captain," no need for the caps.
  • "in the Bluebirds starting" who knows what that means? (you and me, but all our readers?)
  • "ruling him out for a month.[58] He returned on 5 March" that was more like 2.5 months.....
  • "His first goal of the season, against Sheffield United, led to Cardiff to win their three opening games of the season" that's some goal......
  • "as well as keeping three clean sheets" well I think only 'keepers can really keep clean sheets, but he could have "helped" keep those clean sheets...
  • Do all our readers know what a clean sheet is in this context?
  • We have an article for EFL Championship Player of the Month.
  • "46 appearances, scoring 4 goals" vs "43 appearances in all competitions, scoring a career high seven goals" be consistent, I would switch that 4 for a four.
  • "conceded jointly, the fewest goals" no need for that comma.
  • Anything to report at the beginning of this season? I see he's made a few apps?
  • "Morrison is eligible to represent both England and the Republic of Ireland ..." can this be explained for those readers who aren't commensurate with the "grandfather" rules etc??
  • "as "Courageous," no need for that capital C.
  • Ref 44 has two spaced hyphens (!!).

That's all I have, so I'll put the nomination on hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 13:30, 13 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for taking on another review TRM. Apologies on some of the sloppy stuff here, I must have forgotten to give this a tidy copyedit before nominating. I've addressed all of the issues above, apart from the current season. It's been rather uneventful so far! Thanks. Kosack (talk) 06:42, 14 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
No problem at all Kosack, it's better for me to have something to complain about rather than just a one-line review which says "yep, looks okay to me!". I'll see if I can take a look later today, but I have a busy weekend so it may be a couple of days... we'll see. Cheers, The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 06:43, 14 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
Thanks, no rush. Kosack (talk) 06:47, 14 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
Cool, no issues now, so I'm promoting. Great work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 10:03, 14 September 2019 (UTC)Reply