Talk:Pnina Tornai

Latest comment: 8 years ago by 2601:89:8180:17:1128:2EF9:BF59:2B8D in topic Comments on article

Comments on article edit

I received a request on my talk page for comments on this article:

  • It could use an infobox, see Template:Infobox person.
  • The name of her mother is conspicuously absent.
  • I suggest merging the early life and personal life sections.
  • Each statement about divorce should have a cite, even if its multiple cites to the same article. Statements about living people that could be viewed as negative or controversial should be well cited per WP:BLP.
  • In the career section, you probably don't need to say "According to the New York Times" as it is already cited there, the "according to the New York Times." in the following section is fine.
  • "vixen essense" should be a quote, add an extra cite to the source immediately after the quotation marks. Otherwise language like that seems like weasel words.
  • Try to find an acceptably licensed photo, which means creative commons or public domain, as we can't use non-free images for living people.
  • There are several minor errors that should be corrected in a copyedit.
  • Try to find some WP:categories to add.
  • The article is a WP:ORPHAN as no other articles link to it.

Its a good start for a first article, I don't see any really critical issues, just places where it could be improved. Monty845 02:02, 4 November 2011 (UTC) Comma splices... Comma splices everywhere.Reply

Thanks for all of your help! It was really helpful for my project! I do have one question, where can I find an acceptable picture for this page? I looked at wikimedia and could not find one there and I also looked at flickr and found one but I am worried about copyright infringement so I am not sure what to do. If you have any suggestions for solving my problem that would be great! Riffraff520 (talk) 15:25, 8 November 2011 (UTC)user:Riffraff520Reply

In Early Life, it says her grandmother's name Perla translates in Hebrew to Pnina. This is not correct. One tradition of Jewish naming is to keep the Hebrew name the same as that of the person for whom one is named, but using a different name in the vernacular language - either a translation of the Hebrew name's meaning or a name beginning with the same first letter as the Hebrew name. It seems likely that grandmother Perla has/had the Hebrew name Pnina. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2601:89:8180:17:1128:2EF9:BF59:2B8D (talk) 03:09, 23 May 2015 (UTC)Reply