Talk:Murder of Lenford Harvey

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Sainsf in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:02, 22 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

Will review. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:02, 22 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lead
  • Should be at most 2 paras long for an articles of this length
  • No mention of the murder?
Background
  • Jamaica AIDS Support (JASL) Should be "(JAS)" as in the lead. Also see "Harvey led JASL's annual candle-lit vigil"
  • It appears that there is a different in sources; some refer to Jamaica AIDS Support (JAS) and Jamaica AIDS Support for Life (JASL). Their official website uses the latter, so I will go ahead and standardise the use of the acronym to JASL. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:13, 22 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
Murder
  • Three armed men broke into Harvey's home When was this?
  • This is something that isn't quite clear. I'm presuming that it happened on the night of 29/30 November, but the sources in question do not make this clear. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:21, 22 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • This confusion needs to be mentioned. So that readers know we are not poor in the coverage. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:05, 23 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Okay, I've looked into this in greater depth and one source refers to him being abducted two hours prior to the discovery of his body. This suggests that he was indeed abducted on 30 November, so I have included this in the article. I hope that that fixes the situation. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:33, 23 June 2016 (UTC)Reply


  • they forced him into the car and abducted him Make this a new sentence.
  • In the early hours of Wednesday 30 November 2005 "30 November 2005 (Wednesday)"
  • I'm not sure that this is a style that would be used in Jamaican English. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:21, 22 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
References
  • Not sure why there is a "Citations" subheading.
  • Stick to any one format: "Ghosh, Palash" or "Palash Ghosh"

No copyvio/dablink/external link issues. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:57, 22 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

Thanks, promoted. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:05, 24 June 2016 (UTC)Reply