Talk:HSwMS Manligheten

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 23:42, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:42, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

• File:HMS Manligheten original appearance.jpg needs a PD-1996 tag
  • Added.
• Be more exact in your conversions; add a |1 or a ftin to the templates
  • Added.
• The torpedo tubes are 45 cm, not 46
  • Amended.
• The proper code for {{convert|50.43|m|ftin|abbr=on|adj=on}}-long is {{convert|50.43|m|ftin|adj=mid|-long}} though you should check template:convert to see if you can use that in an abbreviated form
  • Reworded to avoid the issue.
• TE engines don't have shafts and use indicated horsepower. Be sure to add a link in the main body
  • Changed.
• Training should link to Gun laying
  • Changed.
• Link amidships, nickel steel, Horsfjärden
  • Added.
• The main armament was protected by barbettes were 190 mm (7.5 in) thick and turrets having an armoured face 190 mm (7.5 in) thick and the remainder 140 mm (5.5 in) thick. This is awkward and is missing at least one word
  • Reworded.
• visit Rotterdam, but in between extending the tour to include Bilbao and San Sebastian. awkward
  • Reworded.
• Add links to all the AA weapons added during the modernization--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:13, 19 March 2024 (UTC)
  • Added for the 25-mm and 40-mm guns. The 57-mm gun article are for different and subsequent weapons.
• However, destroyer Wachtmeister, by sailing past at full speed over and over again, succeeded in freeing the battleship using the rolling waves While adding this little nugget to the other articles, I realized that this actually doesn't make sense as written. First off, rolling waves has to be a bad translation. It must mean the bow wave that was generated by the ship's high speed. Second link destroyer and add "the" before it.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:38, 19 March 2024 (UTC)
  • That sounds reasonable. Links have been added and the text altered. simongraham (talk) 20:00, 19 March 2024 (UTC)
• You missed 21 and 5.7 cm, both in the main body and the infobox
  • If you mean in terms of Wikilinks, I have looked into these and the existing ones for the 5.7 cm are for more modern weapons and there is no page for the 21 cm. When these are created, they can be linked.
    • No, I meant conversions, not links. Although there's enough data in Friedman to do the 21 cm guns.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:11, 20 March 2024 (UTC)
      • Good spot. Added for all except the 152.4 conversion as that is 6.0 in and 25 mm as that is 1.0 in. simongraham (talk) 23:20, 22 March 2024 (UTC)
• Change cemented to backed. I fear a confusion between Krupp cemented armour and ordinary Krupp armour.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:18, 19 March 2024 (UTC)
  • Amended. simongraham (talk) 12:33, 20 March 2024 (UTC)