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Did you know nomination
edit- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Desertarun (talk) 07:54, 13 June 2021 (UTC)
- ... that in a 1922 letter to the editor, Flora Kaai Hayes defended the morality of hula compared to the "bosom to bosom, thigh to thigh dances" seen on steamboats and roof gardens at the time? Source: The Honolulu Advertiser, rightmost column, about halfway down
- ALT1:... that Hawaiian legislator Flora Kaai Hayes was given the Kalākaua Torah after the death of Princess Abigail Kawānanakoa, and owned it until her own death? Source: The Honolulu Advertiser, center column
- ALT2:... that Flora Kaai Hayes, who would later serve in the Hawaii Territorial House, stopped in Hollywood to act in 1937 film The Hurricane on her way back to Hawaii from a conference in Virginia? Source: The Honolulu Advertiser, photo caption
- Reviewed: KIXL
Created by Ezlev (talk). Self-nominated at 19:26, 2 June 2021 (UTC).
- The article is long enough and new enough with no copyright violations. A QPQ has been completed. The promoter can choose the hook. SL93 (talk) 23:53, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
These two news clippings conflict with a few things in the article, and have some new details
editFirst page of article and continued. ezlevtlk/ctrbs 07:47, 3 June 2021 (UTC)
- ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 04:06, 14 June 2021 (UTC)Resolved
Possible source for times in legislature
edit[1] ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 04:25, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
- According to the State of Hawaii's Legislative Reference Bureau, their internal record of Hayes' time in office is as follows:
- 1939 thru 1940, Oahu 4th
- 1943 thru 1952, Oahu 4th
- 1959, Oahu 14th (Terr.)
- Still looking for a more ideal source, although that could probably be cited in a pinch. ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 19:07, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
- I think the state records list the legislative sessions Flora Kaai Hayes sat and served as representatives not her term. If you consider the term as when a representative is elected to when another is elected in their place then checking election records each November every election year might help. KAVEBEAR (talk) 02:01, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
- KAVEBEAR, thanks, I think I pieced it together using election-related news clippings. If you feel like taking a look, I'd appreciate a sanity-check on the relevant section ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 04:48, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
- Yeah, I can take a look later. KAVEBEAR (talk) 16:53, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
- Actually, no. Terms for elected representative don't begin until the following year after election, presumably when they are sworn in by January of the odd number year, which might make it hard to date beginning of terms by month and date?
- KAVEBEAR, thanks, I think I pieced it together using election-related news clippings. If you feel like taking a look, I'd appreciate a sanity-check on the relevant section ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 04:48, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
- I think the state records list the legislative sessions Flora Kaai Hayes sat and served as representatives not her term. If you consider the term as when a representative is elected to when another is elected in their place then checking election records each November every election year might help. KAVEBEAR (talk) 02:01, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
- Elected in 1938 [2]
- Ran for Territorial Senate and Defeated in 1940 [3]
- Elected to House in 1942 [4]
- Elected in 1944 [5]
- Elected in 1946 [6]
- Elected in 1948 [7]
- Elected in 1950 [8]
- Ran in 1952 for Thelma Akana Harrison's vacated Senate seat [9] but defeated [10]
- No run in 1954
- Ran for House and defeated in 1956 [11]
- Ran in 1958 for House [12]
GA Review
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Reviewer: Aussie Article Writer (talk · contribs) 11:15, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | I have done a copyedit, but some of the sentences are a bit choppy. Can you ask the Guild of Copy Editors to assist with this?
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. |
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2. Verifiable with no original research: | ||
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | I made a small structural change. | |
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | Please note: any sources I cannot read, I am assuming are correct. I do, however, feel it is appropriate to note that I have not been able to verify them.
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2c. it contains no original research. | ||
2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism. | ||
3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | ||
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | ||
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | ||
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. |
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Discussion
edit- I note that the image in this source which has a photo of a still image of the film looks like it may be out of copyright... perhaps something to add to the article? - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 12:24, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
- Ezlev I have reviewed the article, hopefully you will be back to see this review! I would love to help work with you on getting this to GA status, I think we can IAR and extend this review till you get back. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 12:50, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
- Aussie Article Writer, thank you so much for beginning this review! I’ll be offwiki for the remainder of the month, and I can’t wait to work on this with you once I’m back. ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 21:56, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
Aussie Article Writer, I'm back! I believe your notes from attributes 1b and 2b are resolved now – if not, please let me know what you'd like changed. (It's possible that the lede is still too long, but if so, I think your fresh eyes are needed to determine what else to cut.) I'm about to do a proofread in hopes of cleaning up some of the choppy sentences mentioned in 1a. As for 3a, I'm having trouble picturing where to include those organizations in the article since there's so little information (when she was in a given position, for how long, etc). Do you think a list-like structure in a subsection could work, or if not, what were you imagining? Thanks again for working with me on this! ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 18:13, 27 July 2021 (UTC)
- Ezlev No probs, if there isn't much info maybe make a a list like you suggest would do the trick. The lead is much better, I just coalesced the first two paragraphs together. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 01:37, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
- Aussie Article Writer, thanks! I've added an "other positions" section with a simple bulleted list, omitting positions which are mentioned earlier in the article. What are your thoughts? ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 03:05, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
- I’d add all the positions, no need to omit them. It is a list, after all. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 22:02, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
- I don't think that'll make sense if the list is framed as "other positions", i.e. positions not mentioned in the article prose. Making it a list of all positions Hayes held seems strange, but if you think that's better...? ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 22:45, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay in responding. I agree with you, best make it a list of all organizations. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 22:38, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
- Not a problem – there's no rush (a fact of which I have to frequently remind myself). I've made the suggested change! ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 03:14, 31 July 2021 (UTC)
- Legend! This passes GA. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 16:26, 3 August 2021 (UTC)
- Fantastic! Thank you so much for the review, Aussie Article Writer. ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 17:05, 3 August 2021 (UTC)
- Legend! This passes GA. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 16:26, 3 August 2021 (UTC)
- Not a problem – there's no rush (a fact of which I have to frequently remind myself). I've made the suggested change! ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 03:14, 31 July 2021 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay in responding. I agree with you, best make it a list of all organizations. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 22:38, 30 July 2021 (UTC)
- I don't think that'll make sense if the list is framed as "other positions", i.e. positions not mentioned in the article prose. Making it a list of all positions Hayes held seems strange, but if you think that's better...? ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 22:45, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
- I’d add all the positions, no need to omit them. It is a list, after all. - Aussie Article Writer (talk) 22:02, 28 July 2021 (UTC)
- Aussie Article Writer, thanks! I've added an "other positions" section with a simple bulleted list, omitting positions which are mentioned earlier in the article. What are your thoughts? ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 03:05, 28 July 2021 (UTC)