Talk:Admiral Lazarev-class monitor
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:08, 30 October 2015 (UTC)
Will be happy to offer a review. I suspect this review will be somewhat short given how well written the article appears to be JAGUAR 22:08, 30 October 2015 (UTC)
- Perhaps, but be sure to ask for clarifications if there are bit that need further/better explanations.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:22, 30 October 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments edit
- "Four ships were ordered, but the last two were significantly modified and became the separate Admiral Spiridov class" - were they modified during construction? If so might be worth mentioning in the lead
- "The Admiral Lazarevs were stricken from the Navy List in 1907 and 1909" - needs a "respectively" on the end
- I didn't actually name each ship, so respectively isn't needed.
- "In November the committee decided" - November 1863?
- "the two designs, whileAdmiral Chicagov and Admiral Spiridov" - space needed
- "The monitors were ultimately designed to be armed with six 20-caliberObukhov 9-inch rifled guns" - another space needed here?
- "The deck armor was in two layers with a total thickness of 1 inch" - I think "1 inch" could do with a conversion
- Converted on first use in the first section of the armor paragraph
- There's no mention on their scraping in the Construction and service (feel free to ignore this)
- Covered, with a cite, in the table.
Thanks for looking at this.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:22, 3 November 2015 (UTC)
On hold edit
A very solid article. I could only find a handful of minor prose issues but once they're all addressed then this should be good to go. I hope I haven't made any "newbie" misunderstandings! 
JAGUAR 13:11, 31 October 2015 (UTC)
