Talk:Suicidal Tour

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• ... that after performing a tour, football club Santa Cruz Futebol Clube had four fewer players, two of them being dead?

• Source: www1.folha.uol.com.br/esporte/2023/04/ha-80-anos-santa-cruz-completava-a-maior-epopeia-da-historia-humana.shtml (in Brazilian Portuguese, limited access): "Partiu em 2 de janeiro, no escuro. Só conseguiu retornar ao Recife em 29 de abril, com quatro jogadores a menos, dois deles mortos" (transl. It left on January 2, in the dark. They only managed to return to Recife on April 29, four players short, two of them dead)

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Moved to mainspace by Hilst (talk). Number of QPQs required: 0. Nominator has less than 5 past nominations.

– Hilst [talk] 13:30, 26 May 2024 (UTC).

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: None required.

Overall: This is a fascinating article. There are so many potential hooks! Nazis, football, thieves... everything looks good to me.  — Chris Woodrich (talk) 14:10, 18 June 2024 (UTC)

GA Review

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Nominator: Hilst (talk · contribs) 20:14, 23 May 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Idiosincrático (talk · contribs) 09:55, 28 May 2024 (UTC)

Hi, I'd like to review this article. When I first read it, I found the story fascinating and engrossing. It honestly reads like a Hollywood movie. I don't read or speak Portuguese but I don't suspect that it'll be a problem. Idiosincrático (talk) 09:55, 28 May 2024 (UTC)

Comments

• Brazilian Portuguese is wikilinked twice in the lead, probably is only required the first time.
• The lead mentions Nazi attacks, there is no mention of any attack in the article and the Costa source states that there was only the threat of Nazi attacks. I suggest rephrasing to: "several problems faced by the club, such as deaths, the threat of Nazi attacks, and a lack of funding."
• I'd probably wikilink dysentery the first time it's used in the Manaus section.
• Past tense: "Goalkeeper King and striker Papeira are diagnosed with typhoid fever" >>> "Goalkeeper King and striker Papeira were diagnosed with typhoid fever"
• "The club would play against Paysandu just three days after the passing" >>> "The club then played against Paysandu, just three days after the passing"

I think this is a good start, I might have more later. Idiosincrático (talk) 10:17, 28 May 2024 (UTC)

• Thanks for reviewing my article!  Done all :) – Hilst [talk] 10:48, 28 May 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.