Talk:Soeman Hs

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Crisco 1492 in topic GA Review
Good articleSoeman Hs has been listed as one of the Language and literature good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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June 13, 2016Good article nomineeListed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on April 19, 2016.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that the detective fiction writer Soeman Hs is considered a pioneer of the Indonesian short story for his collection Kawan Bergeloet?
On this day...A fact from this article was featured on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "On this day..." column on May 8, 2021.

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 14:58, 11 June 2016 (UTC)Reply


I always enjoy reading your articles, so I'm happy to offer a review of this one. Josh Milburn (talk) 14:58, 11 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • Is Pasir Pengaraian worth a link? Indonesian National Committee? Don't be scared of redlinks?
    • Pasir Pangaraian appears to be a sub-village administrative district (hamlet, I usually translate it). ID-Wiki stops at the village level, and quite a few WikiProject Indonesia people think even going to the subdistrict level (kecamatan) is a bit too far. We do have an article for the Central Indonesian National Committee, which was the predecessor to the current Indonesian parliament. We don't have articles on any of the sub-committees (predecessors of the Dewan Perwakilan Rakyat Daerah, I believe). Not sure we'd be able to find enough on the KNI for this area to make an article, and an {{ill}} to Dewan Perwakilan Rakyat Daerah doesn't seem like it would help much. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 02:43, 12 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • "was brought made the head" I assume that this is an error?
  • Is Kotanopan worth a link?
  • Could you specify his religion/denomination more explicitly in the early life section? Sorry if this is obvious; it's not going to be for readers unfamiliar with this part of the world.
    • I'd have thought "Quran" was clear enough, but added.
  • "Soeman writing in the 1923," ??
    • Garbled. Fixed.
  • "Hasibuan in Malay-dominated Bengkalis, he took the pen name Soeman Hs" Are "Hasibuan" and "Soeman Hs" words-as-words? If so, they should be italicised.
    • Does "Words as words" applies to names? Italicizing in this case strikes me as inappropriate. Looking at FAs, the featured article on Ringo Starr does not use italics in the sentence "About this time he adopted the stage name Ringo Starr; derived from the rings he wore and also because it implied a country and western influence." — Chris Woodrich (talk) 02:43, 12 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • "('Undivided Love')" Why the single quotes? Is there something in the MOS about this? (Same with other titles)
  • You switch tenses in referring to the books; one follows a plot, the other followed a plot. I don't mind which way you go, but consistency would be good.
  • "Soehardja ... Martaperdana" Are these mononymous people?

Images seem fine, though I'm a little surprised about the FOP tag. Sources look great. It's generally a great read and a really interesting subject. You seem to skim over certain aspects, but I'm happy that this reflects the sources available, especially given how you have sourced discussion that he was/is forgotten. Josh Milburn (talk) 15:58, 11 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

And please double-check my edits. Josh Milburn (talk) 15:58, 11 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • There are two other sources that I'm still tracking down (one written by the regional government of Riau, the other by a team from the national government) but I haven't had any luck yet. They should help fill what gaps remain. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 02:43, 12 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

And before I leave this... If I was writing the article, I'd structure it slightly differently. I'd have the first four sections as subsections of a section called something like "Life and career". I'd also include a mention in the writing career section that he was still teaching in this time; instead, you have the slightly non-chronological mention of the length of his teaching career at the end of one section before a discussion of his writing career (which started long before the end of his teaching career). Anyway, I'll leave that with you. Josh Milburn (talk) 16:05, 11 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

Ok, great, I'm happy that this is promotable at this time- it makes a strong GA. I'll leave the thought about a politician category and the possible restructuring with you. Do let me know if you take this to FAC and I'll aim to find some time for another read-through. Josh Milburn (talk) 18:49, 13 June 2016 (UTC)Reply