Talk:On the Low

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This article is nearly two months old, making a review wholeheartedly due! --K. Peake 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
• List as Elof Loelv under producer(s) since this is not a track listing
• "who produced the track." → "who handled the production." and this should be the second sentence of the lead instead
• Add a sentence inbetween credits and release here mentioning that the song was one of the first written for the album and when the singer previewed it
• ""On the Low" is a downtempo" → "it is a downtempo"
• Pipe minimal to Minimal music
• "the single appeared below" → "the song appeared below"
• "chart at number twelve on" → "chart, reaching number 12 on" per MOS:NUM
• Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "on Nyhetsmorgon and a session" → "on Nyhetsmorgon in 2018 and a 2020 session"
• Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music

Done. Let me know if the added sentence works or not. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

That is a proper addition to the lead, though I copyedited the preview part to avoid overusage of it. --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Background

• Remove comma after third studio album
• "for the album,[2] and" → "for the album and" moving [2] solely to the end of the sentence
• The two tracks being the only ones written by her and Loelv is not sourced
• "said that the two spent long days" → "said that the two spent heavy time" per the source
• Pipe minimal to Minimal music
• "out of all tracks" → "out of all the tracks"
• Pipe chorus to Refrain
• "when it came to melody." → "in terms of melody."
• "she labelled it" → "she labelled the track"

Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Composition and lyrics

• Wikilink falsetto on the audio sample text
• "minimal and detailed production backed" → "minimal and detailed production, backed" on the audio sample, with the pipe
• Pipe bird calls to Bird vocalization
• Pipe drums to Drum kit
• Remove comma after percussion
• Remove speech marks for minimalistic since this is an encyclopedic term
• "and NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized" → "whereas NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized
• "in lines such as" → "in lines such as,"
• "the closing bird calls "transform Styrke's" → "the closing bird calls transform "Styrke's" per the source's wording

Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Release and promotion

• The skateboard being over a yellow background is not sourced
• Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
• The source mentions her performing the song in a small room and no bottom part is sourced for the lyrics
• "Lisa Hultengren directed the video with" → "Lisa Hultengren directed the video, with"
• Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
• "She learnt how to" → "Styrke learnt how to"

Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Reception

• "gave it a "Song of the Day" designation while writing," → "gave the track a "Song of the Day" designation, writing,"
• Mention how Mylrea highlighted the vocals in the NME review
• Start a new sentence at the Simon Österhof review because the NME one will be long enough on its own once expanded
• "found it "irresistible"" → "found the song "irresistible""
• "whispering working well" → "whispering work[s] well" in this context, as otherwise it does not read correctly
• "He wrote, "The careful" → "He wrote that "the careful"
• "more to discover."" → "more to discover"." per MOS:QUOTE (this is not a full sentence as the source shows)
• "the song suffered from" → "the song suffers from"
• "below the top 100 at number twelve on" → "at number 12 on" per MOS:NUM (previous part removal because it has already been stated)

Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

• Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel.

Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

• Are you sure programming is listed before synthesizer under credits; I can't check since I don't have an account?

Changed up the order. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Charts

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks great at 24.8%!!!!
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool

I'm fairly inactive on Wiki these days. What tool is this? Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

• Add the language parameter to refs 11 and 16
• Cite BroadwayWorld as publisher instead on ref 29

Done! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed and in all honesty, that went quick because this is a quality article; congrats! --K. Peake 09:13, 5 April 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for a thorough review, Kyle! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

✓ Pass now, very good job and I would have checked through this sooner if you'd have given me a ping! --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)