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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Ofloofla. Peer reviewers: Thisismyanonymoususername.

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Alienautopsy's Peer Review

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Good job! Citations work and everything is organized correctly. Overall good flow throughout and well written. A really great job using the active voice, appropriate syntax and providing facts in a chronological order. The only suggestions I have are to fix a few grammatical errors; punctuation marks which are missing (hyphens predominately) and move a couple commas around.

1."Oscar nominated" in the first paragraph should be changed to "Oscar-nominated"

2. "From a young age she had an interest in art,..." maybe consider moving the comma "From a young age, she had an interest in art and pursued..."

3. In the Career section: "seven minute long film..." should be "seven-minute" "Consisting of fifty five..." and "twentieth century" should be "Consisting of fifty-five" and "twentieth-century"

4. Also the sentence that starts "Consisting of..." is quite long. Maybe change to "...evolution of modern art. Beginning with Impressionism and continuing until the Pop Art movement and Hyperrealism through metamorphic transitions between eat work of art.

5."The sound and music for this film was provided by composer Jamie Haggerty and Chel White." should be changed to "The sound and music for the film were provided by..."

6. Possible syntax problem in the sentence "Using mixed media including writing and calligraphy, and cerating through black clay on white backgrounds..." I'm not sure was "cerating" means but I'm also not familiar with the medium so possibly it works.

Alienautopsy (talk) 00:14, 23 February 2018 (UTC)AlienautopsyReply

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  • Excellent sources and well-formatted. Good use of citations throughout the text.

Chronophoto (talk) 00:57, 20 February 2018 (UTC) (course instructor)Reply

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Everything in your article is relevant and neutral. Your citations are organized and well-linked to their sources. Really well-written! Asides from minor grammar changes (as listed by Alienautopsy), your article looks great! Thisismyanonymoususername (talk) 03:34, 27 February 2018 (UTC)Reply

Thanks Espngeek (talk) 18:09, 29 September 2018 (UTC)Reply