Talk:Brief Moment (song)

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 19:08, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will review this tomorrow; hopefully you will have a timely response, see when I reviewed one of your articles last time for example! --K. Peake 19:08, 17 December 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good
• "and the song's producer," → "and the sole producer,"
• Target single to Single (music)
• "22 February 2019 through Tusk or Tooth Records and" → "22 February 2019, through Tusk or Tooth Records, and"
• "Musically, "Brief Moment" is a stripped-down" → "It is a stripped-down"
• "piano on the track." → "piano on the song."
• "a series of emotional events that Oh Land endured..." this is backed up, but where is the part about it being after her album in 2014 sourced in the body?
• "to that of a" → "to the words of a"
• "generally mixed reviews from reviewers," → "generally mixed reviews from critics,"
• "others calling it unfinished." → "others calling the song unfinished."

Background and release

• Remove wikilink on Oh Land
• "and recording a rendition of" → "and a rendition of"
• "that her fifth studio album would be released" → "that her then-upcoming album was set for release"
• "The release of the song came" → "The release of "Brief Moment" came"
• "regarding the parent album's release day," → "regarding the release date of Family Tree,"
• "It appears as the fourth track on Family Tree," → ""Brief Moment" was included as fourth track on Oh Land's fifth studio album Family Tree," plus this info belongs directly after the second single sentence in the last para of this section
• "which was released in full on" → "which was released on"
• "Bartlett also produced the track, with Oh Land receiving additional credits" → "Bartlett solely produced the track, while Oh Land received additional credit"
• "The song's cover artwork" → "The song's artwork"
• "created by Danish designer" → "that was created by Danish designer"
• "serves as the album's second single," → "served as the album's second single," with the target
• "she also announced a promotional tour for Family Tree on the same day," → "she announced a promotional tour for the album on the same day as the single release,"
• "Simultaneous with the song's digital distribution, Oh Land released a" → "Oh Land also shared a"

Composition and lyrics

• Wikilink synthesizer on the img text and fix Bartlett's surname, but where is it sourced that he played synth?
• ""Brief Moment" is a stripped-down" → "Musically, "Brief Moment" is a stripped-down"
• "backed by orchestral arrangements." → "that is backed by orchestral arrangements."
• Wikilink synthesizer
• "orchestral conductor – Peter Pejtsik –" → "orchestral conductor Peter Pejtsik"
• "and it follows the" → "and follows the"
• "It opens with" → ""Brief Moment" opens with"
• "and move to Denmark." → "and relocation to Denmark."
• "and hopeful" and that" → "and hopeful", and that"
• "the song refers to someone" → "the lyrics refer to someone"
• "equated the opening lyric" → "equated the opening lyrics"
• "to that of a" → "to the content of a"
• Target choruses to Refrain

Critical reception

• "was selected by some music critics as a highlight on Family Tree." → "was met with generally mixed reviews from music critics; some selected it as a highlight on Family Tree and others labeled the song unfinished."
• "Fernando from Billboard named it a" → "Fernando named it a"
• "and lead single "Human Error" for building up" → "and "Human Error" for building up"
• "a good songwriter becoming of" → "a good songwriter because of"
• You don't need to introduce Mxdwn.com as an entertainment website
• "believing the song's use of a full orchestra was" → "believing the usage of a full orchestra is"
• "felt incomplete and called its lyrics" → "feels incomplete and labeling the lyrics"

Live performances

• "also plays the drums." → "plays the drums as she sings."
• Target NorthSide Festival to NorthSide Festival (Denmark)
• Remove wikilink on Denmark
• "of August 2019. She performed" → "of August 2019, with Oh Land performing"
• "in between Family Tree track" → "in between fellow album track"
• "enjoyed the Oh Land's delivery" → "enjoyed Oh Land's delivery"

Track listing

• Good

Credits and personnel

• Are you sure the personnel are ordered correctly based on their credits?
• Target mixing to Audio mixing (recorded music)

Release history

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks alright at 33.0%
• Great job on the archiving!
• Target Amazon.com to Amazon (company) on ref 2
• Wikilink Sterling Sound on ref 10 per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Wikilink Apple Music on ref 11's first citation
• WP:OVERLINK of Oh Land on ref 16
• mxdwn.com → Mxdwn.com on ref 20

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until everything is fixed after a nice review, you do have some good writing skills may I remark! --K. Peake 10:32, 18 December 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake – thanks for the review and the kind words. I believe I have addressed all of your concerns. Please let me know if there is anything else I can do. Happy holidays, Carbrera (talk) 22:36, 19 December 2020 (UTC).

Carbrera ✓ Pass for this after I completed some brief copy editing of the lead! --K. Peake 07:53, 20 December 2020 (UTC)

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