Talk:Battle of Orašje

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 13:31, 21 August 2014 (UTC)

I'll review this one. Peacemaker67 (send... over) 13:31, 21 August 2014 (UTC)

Rate Attribute Review Comment
1. Well written:
  1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
  • The Background section needs greater chronological context, use of years with dates (ie 1992, 1993 etc) as it is currently hard to tell when some events happened Y
  • You need to introduce the abbrev RSK before using it Y
  • I've c/e'd the article, feel free to revert any changes
  1b. it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
  2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
  2b. all inline citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines.
  2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
  3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
  3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  • I have a query about the JNA being reorganised into the VRS. That is not strictly true, as a large portion of the JNA withdrew to what is now Serbia. There is then a mention of JNA forces in BH, and whilst there might well have been large numbers of former JNA personnel and vehicles in the Bosnian Serb forces, were there JNA-badged elements inside Bosnia at this stage? Could you expand this bit to reflect the complexity? Y
  • Reference to Serb artillery should probably be Bosnian Serb artillery Y
  5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content.
  6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
  7. Overall assessment. On hold for seven days for remaining points to be addressed Passed

Suggestions

  • add alt text to maps
  • add photographs
  • you should probably redirect the operation names to this article

Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 03:27, 22 August 2014 (UTC)

Thank you for the review. I have tried to address a couple of issues, specifically whose artillery exactly was it in April 1992 near Sarajevo, and bits about JNA personnel transfer to the VRS and JNA withdrawal. I've also introduced the RSK abbrev, and added years to dates in the background. Cheers--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:35, 22 August 2014 (UTC)

Great, happy with the changes, passing. Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 09:58, 22 August 2014 (UTC)
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