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List of Indianapolis 500 winners

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Nominator(s): EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 09:23, 1 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The Indianapolis 500 is a 500 mile auto race held at the fabled Indianapolis Motor Speedway during the month of May and part of the informal Triple Crown of Motorsport. Many famous drivers such as Hélio Castroneves, A. J. Foyt, Rick Mears, Al Unser, Dario Franchitti, Mario Andretti, Johnny Rutherford, Juan Pablo Montoya, Bobby Unser and Jacques Villeneuve have been winners of this event. I look forward to all the comments on this review. EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 09:23, 1 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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  • "reverting to International 500-Mile Sweepstakes Race from 1920 until 1980" - and since then.......?
  • "The American Automobile Association were the governing body" => "The American Automobile Association was the governing body"
  • "between its inception until 1955" => "from its inception until 1955"
  • "then United States Auto Club from 1956 to 1997" => "then the United States Auto Club from 1956 to 1997"
  • "which sees a bas-relief sculpture of the winning driver's face added to the base" - would probably be better as "and a bas-relief sculpture of the winning driver's face is added to the base of the trophy itself"
  • "The driver receives a laurel wreath made of 33 ivory-colored Cymbidium orchids featuring burgundy tips and 33 miniature flags interwoven with blue, red and white ribbons in victory lane each year since 1960" => "Since 1960 the driver receives a laurel wreath made of 33 ivory-colored Cymbidium orchids featuring burgundy tips and 33 miniature flags interwoven with blue, red and white ribbons in the victory lane"
    • Done, although in American English, the spelling "Victory Lane" is common EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 12:01, 1 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
      • The issue was not the spelling but the missing word "the" before "victory" -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:24, 1 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • In the key what's a rookie in this context? A driver in his first year of competitive racing? A driver driving in this particular race for the first time? Or something else?
    • A driver who is competing for the first time at the Indianapolis 500 EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 12:01, 1 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
      • "Indicates winning driver was a Indianapolis 500 rookie" should be "Indicates winning driver was an Indianapolis 500 rookie" -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 12:24, 1 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  • It's probably too much detail for the lead to mention that the 2020 race was held in August due (I presume) to COVID, but it might merit a footnote
  • Note d is not a complete sentence so doesn't need a full stop
  • Think that's all I got -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 10:19, 1 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Prose review from Airship — OPPOSE

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  • "200 lap, 500 mi (800 km)" should be a separate sentence, to avoid number overload.
  • The lead doesn't specify when the inception of the event was.
  • "before becoming the 300-Mile Liberty Sweepstakes in 1919" I can't help but notice that the 1919 race in the table was contested over 500 miles? Is something wrong here?
  • "The American Automobile Association governed the event" the sentence would work better as passive clauses.
  • "is presented"--> "has been presented"
  • link some combination of "art deco sterling silver"; the "art deco" should definitely be capitalised
  • "the base of the trophy itself" make it clear that this is the original trophy; furthermore, they have only moved onto the base relatively recently.
  • "Since 1960, the driver receives...and drinks a bottle of milk, a tradition started after the 1936 event." This sentence is a mess: tenses, meaning, clarity is all lacking.
  • "from a prize pool" unnecessary
  • "a hand-made quilt from Jeanetta Holder at the winners' photo shoot the day following the race" ??? this convoluted sentence provides absolutely no clarification
  • "his last, a span of two decades. He won his" --> "his last, winning his"
  • "his last (to date)" MOS:RELTIME
  • "Juan Pablo Montoya had to wait the longest time between his maiden victory at the 2000 race, and his second win followed 15 years later at the 2015 event" between distinguishes two items; only one (the maiden victory) is provided.
  • "Troy Ruttman is the youngest winner of the Indianapolis 500; he was 22 years and 80 days old when he won the 1952 event. Al Unser is the oldest winner of the Indianapolis 500; he was 47 years and 360 days old when he won the 1987 race." Unnecessary repetition: can be combined into one sentence (e.g. "TR and AU are the youngest and oldest 500 winners, triumphing at the age of 22 years and 80 days and 47 years and 360 days respectively")
  • "It has been won by 52 American drivers in 74 editions of the race" --> "52 American drivers have won 74 editions of the race"
  • " followed by British and Brazilian racers who have each achieved victory eight times amongst five and four drivers, respectively." convoluted, please rephrase.
  • "There have been seven countries who have produced only one winner" --> "Seven countries have produced only one winner"
  • "There have been two editions, the 1924 and 1941 races, where two drivers sharing a car ..." --> "In the 1924 and 1941 races, two drivers sharing a car..."

The tables themselves look good. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 23:07, 2 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  • Regreful oppose on lead prose quality, thus violating criteria 1) and 2). Half a dozen issues remain from the first pass, and the first paragraph has only gotten more convoluted and stilted since then, with repetition and trivia taking up space useful information could use. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 22:46, 8 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@AirshipJungleman29: I have made more changes to the article but am not sure whether they are improvements or not EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 19:04, 9 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@AirshipJungleman29: Have worked on the lead and removed much of the existing trivia EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 20:24, 13 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Accessibility review (MOS:DTAB)

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  • Tables need column scopes for all column header cells, which in combination with row scopes lets screen reader software accurately determine and read out the headers for each cell of a data table. You have colscopes for a few of the cells (Laps through KPH), but not the rest- add !scope=col to the other header cells as well. If the cell spans multiple columns with a colspan, then use !scope=colgroup instead.
  • Please see MOS:DTAB for example table code if this isn't clear. I don't return to these reviews until the nomination is ready to close, so ping me if you have any questions. --PresN 01:18, 31 January 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Jake

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  • Support All issues seem to be addressed. Table layout is good and is well written. Jake Jakubowski (Talk) 16:19, 22 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Harrias

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  • "It was first held in 1911 after IMS founders James A. Allison, Carl G. Fisher, Arthur C. Newby and Frank H. Wheeler began experimenting with a long-distance auto race." Do we really need this list of names? And further, I find this awkward phrasing anyhow. Maybe something more like "It was first held in 1911 after the track's owners had experimented with several other long-distances auto races over the previous two years."
  • "The race was not held from 1917 to 1918 and.." It seems odd to have a range for just two years; how about simply "The race was not held in 1917 or 1918 and.."
  • "Following 33 drivers qualifying for the event by completing a four-lap time trial, they are positioned in rows of three.." Two issues with this sentence. Firstly, I really don't think it is very well written, and secondly, it implies that was always the case, but it seems to have differed in early years. A simply clarification stating that this was the case for most of the race's history would suffice on this point, I think.
  • "Juan Pablo Montoya holds the record for the longest period of time between two victories – 15 years between the 2000 and 2015 races." Might it be worth adding after this that Castroneves has the longest span between first and last win?
  • "52 American drivers have.." Per the MOS, don't start a sentence with a number. Also, this needs context to explicitly mention that the race has been won more times by Americans than any other nationality.
  • "The first winner in 1911 was.." This would be better as "The winner of the first race was.."
  • "..who was also the most recent first-time winner" This feels unnecessary.
  • "Two Indianapolis 500s, in 1924 and 1941, were won by two drivers sharing a car." It feels like it would be relevant to add in the context from note c that relief drivers were used in four other years, but not recognized as race winners.
  • "Two Indianapolis 500s.." Maybe "Two editions of the Indianapolis 500.."
  • "Team Penske has won the most races as a car entrant with 18 since their first in 1972." This could do with a footnote, as in the table these wins are listed under three separate entrants.
  • "E.C. Patterson" Per the MOS the initials should be spaced: "E. C. Patterson", same for "H.C.S. Motor Company".
  • The table has a column labelled "Make", described as "Make of car and engine", but many of the items on the list are Models, not Makes: Peugeot L76, Maserati 8CTF, Dallara DW12.
  • It would seem worth adding a footnote somewhere in the "By car make" section, that since ?2009? all chassis have been provided by Dallara.

That's it on the prose and tables. Harrias (he/him) • talk 13:24, 11 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  • @Harrias: Have made changes to the list based on your points EnthusiastWorld37 (talk) 17:10, 11 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    • Support – with the changes made, I'm happy this meets the FL criteria. Harrias (he/him) • talk 08:43, 15 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Source review passed; promoting. --PresN 15:18, 24 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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