Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/George Gosse/archive1

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The article was promoted by Ealdgyth via FACBot (talk) 7 July 2020 [1].


Nominator(s): Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:33, 22 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Nearing the end of my project to get all twelve South Australian Victoria and George Cross recipients to FA. Gosse is the only one from the Royal Australian Navy. He was a naval mine clearance specialist who served in the RAN in the interwar period and WWII. In April 1945 he was given command of a naval party responsible for mine clearance in the recently captured Bremen Harbour in Germany. He displayed courage in defusing three mines under very difficult conditions between 8 May and 19 May 1945, which resulted in him being awarded the George Cross, the highest award for heroism or courage, not in the face of the enemy, that could be awarded to a member of the Australian armed forces at the time. Have at it. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:33, 22 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Image review—pass

All images are free. buidhe 10:55, 22 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Gog the Mild

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Nb, I intend to use this review to claim points in the WikiCup.

  • "the RAN College" The abbreviation (I assume that it is an abbreviation) is not bracketed after first mention.
  • Is it worth linking "acting" to Acting (rank) for readers not militarily inclined?
  • Is there any more detail about why failing the lieutenant's exam at first attempt ended his naval career?
  • Is there any information on why Gosse reenlisted when he did? More than a year after the start of the war, but before Pearl Harbour.
  • "In February 1942, he had been promoted to provisional lieutenant" The change of tense jars. Is there any reason why this is not mentioned in chronological order?
  • "the European port clearance diving base for the Royal Navy" Any chance of a, preferably, in line or, failing that, footnoted explanation of "clearance diving"?
  • "which had to be extracted about 18 inches (460 mm) down a 2-inch (51 mm) wide tube". Should there be 'from' after "extracted"?
  • Is it known who recommended him for his George Cross and/or when?
  • "substantively promoted" I'm not sure that this will mean much to an "average reader".
  • added link to Military rank#Types

Nice one. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:08, 26 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review as always, Gog! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:04, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]
No problem. Your articles, like this one, are usually easy to review, enjoyable to read and educational. Gog the Mild (talk) 10:00, 27 June 2020 (UTC)[reply]

CommentsSupport by CPA-5

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Hmm, haven't I seen this man before? I think I did. What do you think?

  • and experience with the Royal Navy Add here British before Royal.
  • the 2nd South Australian Mounted Rifles in the Second Boer War Mention here that the war took place in South Africa.
  • for further training with the Royal Navy Add here British again.
  • acting lieutenant commander on 30 September 1945, and was demobilised on 20 March 1946 After he defused the last mine what happened in that almost-full year?
  • He brought a Japanese mine back with him to the UK Pipe Japan to the Empire of Japan.
  • to the success of a most difficult and important operation I don't know if this is part of the quote but there's an extra space here.
  • Gosse was part of an armed forces recruiting campaign Pretty odd sentence. Shouldn't it be "an armed force"?

That's anything from me. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 19:48, 2 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking a look, CPA-5. All done except the bit about what he did for the rest of 1945 and early 1946, presumably mine clearance and related duties, but sources (including his navy records) don't say. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:32, 3 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Peacemaker67: That sounds a little bit sad to hear maybe in the near future we would know what he did at that moment. I don't have a reason to not support this and I'd say give yourself a pet on your back for your work. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 13:50, 5 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from AustralianRupert

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Support: G'day, PM, I only have a few minor comments/suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 22:50, 4 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  • in the infobox should the years of service be adjusted to 1958 when he retired from the RANVR?
  • in the lead, suggest starting a new paragraph at "In 1940, he joined..."
  • suggest starting a new paragraph here: "He was promoted to acting lieutenant commander on 30 September 1945"
  • do we know when he returned to Australia?
  • His work was mostly "unspectacular" -- suggest attributing this opinion in the body of the article
  • do we know what is official occupation was when he enlisted in 1940, and again in the post war period?
  • in the References, "Up Top: the Royal Australian Navy and Southeast Asian conflicts, 1955–1972" --> "Up Top: The Royal Australian Navy and Southeast Asian Conflicts, 1955–1972"

Thanks for taking a look, AR! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:36, 5 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

No worries, added my support above. Thanks for your efforts. AustralianRupert (talk) 03:55, 5 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Source review – pass

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  • "Ashcroft, Michael (2012)" is listed in the sources, but not used in the footnotes. The ISBN listed here does not match the one in the Google books version linked to.
  • Why is one newspaper source ("Recruiting Speaker Collapses". The Border Watch.) listed in the references with a short link in the footnotes, while another ("No. 37549". The London Gazette.) is included in full in the footnotes?
  • I think you'll need to remove the comma from the year in the issue number for ""Recruiting Speaker Collapses". The Border Watch.", for some reason it is adding a blank space after the comma which makes it unclear what the number is.
  • The MOS does not require grouping, only consistency. My issue with it as it appears is that it look like two numbers. I had to go into the wiki code to see what it was meant to be telling me. Harrias talk 09:53, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • On the subject of consistency, removing the comma would match "No. 37549" from the London Gazette, so I don't see how it would be a problem. Harrias talk 09:55, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  • In "Turner, John Frayn (2010)." the hyphen in the year range in the title needs to become an endash. Also, why is "Casemate" listed as the publisher, rather than Pen & Sword?
  • Navy Divers, by Gregor Salmon has an interesting nugget claiming that Gosse wasn't even aware of being awarded the medal immediately after, though it doesn't look the highest quality source.
  • I know there's only so many ways of saying plain facts, but I'm not keen on the similarity below:
    • Source: "On 21 October 1940 he enlisted as an ordinary seaman in the Royal Australian Naval Volunteer Reserve."
    • Article: "On 21 October 1940, Gosse enlisted as an ordinary seaman in the Royal Australian Naval Volunteer Reserve."
  • I would attribute the view that he was a "law unto himself" to Crawford.

That's it from me. Harrias talk 08:08, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the source review, Harrias, a couple of queries/quibbles above. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:40, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Peacemaker67: Replied back. Harrias talk 09:53, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Fixed both, Harrias. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:00, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I'm happy to pass the source review now. The article uses a consistent referencing format, is sourced to high-quality reliable sources, does not appear to omit any major research of coverage of the subject, and spotchecks reveal no significant copyvio or close para-phrasing other than the minor point noted and resolved. NB: I will claim WikiCup points for this review. Harrias talk 10:03, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks again! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:06, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@FAC coordinators: this is travelling well, can I have a dispensation for a fresh nom please? Thanks, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:06, 6 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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