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The article was archived by Ian Rose via FACBot (talk) 7 August 2019 [1].

Deep Space Homer edit

Nominator(s): AmericanAir88(talk) 14:16, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Deep Space Homer is a notable episode of the Simpsons. The episode has guest stars of Buzz Aldrin and James Taylor. The episode is well known in the Simpsons community, even having a copy for the International Space Station to watch. In the episode, NASA is concerned by the decline in public interest in space exploration, and therefore decides to send an ordinary person into space. After competition with his friend Barney during training, Homer is selected and chaos ensues when the navigation system on his space shuttle is destroyed.

This is a third run at FA for this article. Their were supports and an oppose leading to a no-consensus to promote. I have acknowledged all issues that were brought up and expanded the article using more reliable sources. I have asked for insight and did personal research. I also requested via the WP:GOCE for copy-editing and it was successful. I believe this article is ready for round three.

Note: Notifying @Aoba47:, @FunkMonk:, and @Popcornduff: as they were involved in the second FA run. AmericanAir88(talk) 14:16, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Support by FunkMonk edit

  • Support - I supported last time for the content, and the edits since appear to have been an improvement on the word-smithing. FunkMonk (talk) 14:21, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Popcornduff edit

  • I generally stay out of FAC reviews these days, but since I've been asked to comment directly... I will say that the plot summary is far too long. This is for a 25-minute episode and it's almost 500 words long - Wikipedia's max plot length for feature films is 700 words, and according to WP:TVPLOT episode summaries should be 400 words max (though imo this episode requires far less). You have information about film parodies in the plot summary - film parodies are nothing to do with plot - a plot is just a sequence of story events.
Now that I'm thinking about this... I have a foggy memory of rewriting this plot section at some point to get it to a more sensible length - did someone else oppose it? I don't remember. Popcornduff (talk) 14:50, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Popcornduff: I shortened the plot to 398 words. The trivial information and parody sentences are removed. @Kees08: also opposed. Kees, I have satisfied the CE requests. AmericanAir88(talk) 15:54, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Support by Kees08 edit

At a glance it looks a lot better; I will give it a look maybe this weekend. Quick suggestion; I just uploaded two Aldrin photos from 1996, which is relatively close to the 1994 taping date. Maybe use one of those, in addition to or to replace the image of him from 1969? Your call. Kees08 (Talk) 17:59, 6 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kees08: I am not sure. Doesn't seem right to have other people in the background when the picture is focused on Buzz. Also, this episode is about Buzz's astronaut career and the current photo shows that. Any opinions? AmericanAir88(talk) 20:45, 7 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I thought about that, figured it might be weird since he is talking to people. I think it looks okay though, I tried cropping one of them: File:Aldrin at STELLAR Program (ARC-1969-AC96-0232-52) (cropped).jpg. Is that better? Kees08 (Talk) 21:22, 7 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Kees08: That would be better. Make sure there is alt text. AmericanAir88(talk) 20:44, 8 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Need to cite production code in the infobox (unless there is a policy I am unaware of)

That's all I have. Prose reads great now. It looked like you wanted me to do the Aldrin photo switch, so I went ahead and made the change. If you preferred the other photo for any reason, feel free to use it instead, I meant it as a suggestion only. Let me know about the one comment above. Kees08 (Talk) 18:43, 16 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Kees08: Photo looks great. As for the code cite, I have honestly never really seen it cited. The code is mentioned in all of the external links as well. AmericanAir88(talk) 12:24, 17 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I double checked others that have passed and you are right. Supporting. Kees08 (Talk) 16:40, 17 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
For the record I agree with you that the NASA ants portion of the article you deleted should be deleted, in case anyone argues with your removal of content. Kees08 (Talk) 22:08, 17 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Kees08: Thank you. Yeah, it just seemed trivial and had nothing to do with the episode. Also, what is the status on this FAC? There hasn't been a comment in a while. AmericanAir88(talk) 15:10, 18 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Aoba47 edit

  • I continue my support from the previous FAC. My comments have been addressed during the last two FACs, and thank you again to AmericanAir88 for putting up with all of my suggestions. My only nitpick is the placement of the The Simpsons: Tapped Out sentence in the "Reception" section since it is not really a critical review. Maybe putting it at the end of the last paragraph of the "Broadcast and release" section would be better? It is a rather small thing though so it does not stand in the way of my support. Good luck with the nomination this time around. I am glad that you are still trying with this one. Aoba47 (talk) 19:49, 11 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Since this nomination has attracted four supports, I would recommend that @AmericanAir88: put in a request for an image and a source review here. Aoba47 (talk) 04:05, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Aoba47: Out of curiosity, What is the benefit of putting a request there? It seems to take a while and other reviewers have checked the sources and images. If you recall the first run of this, the images were checked. If you recall the second run, sources were checked. AmericanAir88(talk) 17:01, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • I believe that an image and a source review still need to be done for this FAC as it is a new FAC. To the best of my knowledge, the above link allows anyone interested in doing image/source reviews to locate nominations that are already further along in the process as it can be difficult to tell that from the long list of current FACs. It is just a suggestion though so I am not saying that you have to do it. I hope that clears things up. Aoba47 (talk) 18:04, 6 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Support from Cas Liber edit

Taking a look now...

Carlos Baeza directed "Deep Space Homer", and it is the only episode of The Simpsons written by executive producer and showrunner David Mirkin. - the subject shifts oddly in this sentence. Can be remedied by "Directed by Carlos Baeza, "Deep Space Homer" is the only episode of The Simpsons written by executive producer and showrunner David Mirkin."

Other than that, nothing is jumping out at me prose-wise.....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:21, 12 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Casliber: Done. AmericanAir88(talk) 14:36, 16 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Image review/Oppose by JJE edit

ALT text is so-so; the one in the infobox should probably mention the meme. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 12:42, 15 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    • @Jo-Jo Eumerus: I have added more info to the alt text. Thank you AmericanAir88(talk) 15:36, 16 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
      • Seems better now. Normally, ALT text is there to substitute for an image's purpose, not to describe what it shows. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:45, 16 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
        • @Jo-Jo Eumerus: Thank you again. What is the future status of this FAC? It has been a while since anyone has brought up any comments. AmericanAir88(talk) 15:47, 16 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
          • Well, based on my reading of the article I'd be inclined to oppose mainly because of odd verbiage such as "The theme of alcoholism in The Simpsons is present ", "When Barney is invited on a space launch" and "By 1994, NASA could no longer present space exploration as part of the Space Race—the tension between the Soviet Union and the United States had by then dissipated." where it's not clear whether it refers to real life or to the in-story setting. I normally don't review other people's prose but this one needs more work than can be done at FAC I think. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 21:13, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Laser brain edit

Recusing from coord duties to take a look here. One of the first things I normally do when an article is relatively short is do a cursory library search to see if any notable sources have been overlooked. In this case, it looks like several academic sources could be used to expand the Production section and even develop a Themes section, since there are several journal articles that (on skimming) look to discuss how this episode plays into the US's culture around the space program. A few are listed below, but you should consult major library databases for a comprehensive list:

  • CHOEYOUNGJEEN. "American Myth and the Spectatorship of SF Films: Reviewing Star Wars and "Deep Space Homer" of the Simpsons." The Journal of English Language and Literature, vol. 54, no. 4, 2008, pp. 461-482.
  • Sharzer, Greg. "Frank Grimes’ Enemy: Precarious Labour and Realism in the Simpsons." Animation, vol. 12, no. 2, 2017, pp. 138-155.
  • HERSCH, MATTHEW H. "Return of the Lost Spaceman: America's Astronauts in Popular Culture, 1959–2006." The Journal of Popular Culture, vol. 44, no. 1, 2011, pp. 73-92.

I must oppose on 1b and 1c until such time that all major sources are consulted and used. --Laser brain (talk) 10:53, 19 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@AmericanAir88: Thanks for beginning the process. I agree with Serial Number 54129 below that we need to fully explore the scholarship here and determine to what extent the themes of this episode have been discussed. I doubt a fully developed Themes section is avoidable, or that we can hope for comprehensiveness without fully exploring the sources evident in a library search. --Laser brain (talk) 12:50, 20 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@AmericanAir88: At this time the Themes section feels hastily assembled and I'm not confident the sources were fully explored. I'm looking at them this weekend. --Laser brain (talk) 11:47, 28 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

SN54129 edit

  • Copy that. I don't suppose I need to oppose (which is dispiriting enough I know), p Per LB's comment, but other important—and as yet unused—works are Katovich and Vaughan's chapter in Musolf's 2016 collection, Cantor's Gilligan Unbound, and the philosophy thing of William Irwin, Mark T. Conard, Aeon J. Skoble. You'd be unlucky not to get something from Steven Keslowitz too. ——SerialNumber54129 11:17, 19 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Laser brain: @Serial Number 54129: Do you want me to add the sources? Some don't seem to benefit the article and some are not even accessible. Also, I would object to a "themes" section. The cultural references adequately talks about various references and themes. AmericanAir88(talk) 14:12, 19 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Review of proposed sources and their suggested treatments.
  1. Have you read the Frank Grimes article? Rather than just seen the episode? The article posits an interesting contrast with the usuality of Simpson's existence.
  2. Young Jeen Choe's 'American Myth' is a 22-page article in a blind-peer reviewed academic journal and I have no idea how it could be merely dismissed as a review, let alone a "book".
  3. Again, I must protest tat the 'Return of the...' article is clearly available and spends multiple paragraphs contextualising the episode.
  4. Gilligan's abound subjects the topic to a short, but nuanced discussion, contextualising the episode with the then-contemporary space-race. Any reason you're "hesitant" to add an academic text from a reputable scholarly publisher?
  5. Musolf: Firstly, it's not Musolf, the article is by Katovich and Vaughan, Musolf being the volume's editor. So the reference you have added needs to be adjusted to account. But in any case, one sentence is completely underusing a source which mentions the topic in-depth multiple times and discusses it over several pages at length.
  6. I agree the 'Philosophy' piece is a short discussion, but it makes a useful point as to how Simpson's voyage reflects his familial relationships.
Ask at WP:RX for any sources you have difficulty accessing; whether it's available to you is, unfortunately, irrelevant: you have to thorough and representative survey of the relevant literature, not just that which you can find.
Incidentally, something else I forgot to mention that's verging on the essential is Paul Halpern's What's Science Ever Done For Us? ([2]), which discusses—notwithstanding a lightness of approach—the physics behind the story.
You say you don't want a 'Themes' section? But the scholarship is based on drawing out the themes discoverable within the episode, so can hardly be avoided. For example, where you added the factoid regarding Simpson's alcoholism, you added it to the 'Prodction' section: it clearly has nothing to do with production.
Remember that 1b—cited by Laser brain above—is about context, and something as sociologically and culturally impactful as The Simpsons is, whether one cares for it or not, a phenonomon for which discusion has broadened far beyond its fan base. ——SerialNumber54129 11:22, 20 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Serial Number 54129: I have added some of the books so far which create a "Themes" section. I have an objection the the oppose Laser brought up below. How does it look so far? AmericanAir88(talk) 22:47, 20 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Objection to Laser's oppose: Currently working on the issue. Adding sources edit

@Serial Number 54129: and @Laser brain:, Not every source needs to be in an article. See WP:OVERKILL. Also, see articles like Lisa the Skeptic and You Only Move Twice. Both are Simpsons episodes brought to FA status. I will try to work with you as best as I can to expand the article, but I do not see the benefit in all these sources. Deep Space Homer is well crafted will a great amount of information for readers. If I try to expand the article with miscellaneous information from sources, it may be longer but lacks quality. I am currently working on incorporated these books. AmericanAir88(talk) 15:30, 20 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Source review of Laserbrain's suggestion edit

@Laser brain:

  • "Frank Grimes, Enemy: Precarious Labour and Realism in the Simpsons" This is about the episode "Homer's Enemy". Homer literally just tells Grimes that he went to space. That is all. It will not benefit the article.
  • "American Myth..." Not reliable as it is just a review. The book is also not available anywhere.
  • "Return of..." Not available and only gives it a passing mention
  • "Gilligans Unbound":  Done
  • "Musolf" :  Done
  • "Simpsons and Philosophy"  Done

AmericanAir88(talk) 14:20, 19 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Serial Number 54129: and @Laser brain: This is my review of the sources provided. I added one of them so far. AmericanAir88(talk) 14:34, 19 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Serial Number 54129: and @Laser brain: I have added three of the books so far. How does it look? AmericanAir88(talk) 15:49, 20 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • @Serial Number 54129: and @Laser brain: Please address Homeostatis's support comment. The user agrees as well with my opinion on the sources. The first three are only passing mentions and will do nothing, but add miscellaneous content. AmericanAir88(talk) 13:49, 27 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Support from Homeostasis07 edit

After reading the entire article, I couldn't find a single aspect of the prose I'd suggest changing. I made a couple of changes to the article none-the-less, expanding the references, but aside from that I see no issues with sourcing or source quality. And after reading this FAC, I'm happy with the changes AmericanAir88 has made. The 3 worthwhile academic sources listed above have been incorporated well into the prose, and I concur that the 3 remaining sources have limited scope for inclusion: they do come across as fairly trivial, with references to this particular episode found within them fairly off-the-cuff, to say the least—not much depth to extract. Also couldn't find any additional academic sources worth mining for this article. With all this in mind, I'm happy to support this article for promotion on FAC 1a, b and c. Homeostasis07 (talk) 01:40, 23 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Section break edit

I have added the sources from the "Oppose" votes above while leaving out some that I feel will add nothing but miscellaneous content. The users have not responded to my further three pings. Homeostatis07 also strengthens by claim. I am going on vacation soon and while I will still be at my laptop sometimes, I may be at limited availability. AmericanAir88(talk) 13:52, 27 July 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Support edit

A greatly entertaining read, well crafted.

  • I alphabetized the bib.
  • I fixed the Cantor ref.
  • Cites 13 and 14 refer to bib entries that don't exist.
  • Hersch, Irwin and Musolf are never used in the refs. Reading above, it seems they were added late in the game and/or by Homeostasis07? Is anything in these works actually used?

Maury Markowitz (talk) 21:19, 3 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Maury Markowitz: Thank you for the help. HI and M are used as Ref 14. Cites 13 and 14 seem to be an issue with the Harv. I fixed the harv refs. AmericanAir88(talk) 04:36, 4 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, so the only one left to consider is Hersch, which I don't see any use of? I looked in a few places where it might be used, but the only unique things in that are the Corvair mention and such, which aren't used. I also clipped down the URLs where the base URL goes directly to the right spot (wish there was a bot that did this). Maury Markowitz (talk) 12:40, 4 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose from Eric Corbett edit

This article is really not very well written, and thus fails criteria 1a. A few examples:

  • "A scene where Kent Brockman is convinced that ants are going to take over the world." "Where" applies to places; should be "in which".
  • "At the Springfield Nuclear Power Plant, Homer Simpson believes he will win the Worker of the Week award since it is a union requirement." What exactly does that mean? That it is a union requirement that Homer believes he will win the Worker of the Week award? It's a union requirement that Homer wins the Worker of the Week award? Something else?
  • "Homer smuggled potato chips aboard the shuttle." Why the sudden and out of place switch to the past tense?
  • "Mirkin based the story on NASA's cancelled Teacher in Space Project where ordinary civilians were to be sent into space ..." Another misuse of "where".
  • "The scene where Homer floats in zero gravity ..." ... and again.
  • "The episode shows the relationship of the Simpson family ..." That doesn't really make sense. Presumably what's meant is that the episode shows the relationships between the members of the Simpson family.
  • "The tension between the Soviet Union and the United States, created competition within nations." Again, that doesn't make sense. What's that comma doing there anyway?

I want to stress again that these are just a few of the many problems that need to be addressed before this article can be considered worthy of promotion in my view. Eric Corbett 20:13, 4 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I've fixed [most of] these on AmericanAir88's behalf, but would like to point out that it's perfectly acceptable to use "where" in several of the instances above—as in, "Where", i.e., the place or situation in which; "wherein", etc. I don't believe this is enough to violate 1a, and would be curious to know of any additional instances of alleged poor grammar... because I can't see any. Homeostasis07 (talk) 01:00, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Let me remind you of what 1a actually says: "its prose must be engaging and of a professional standard"; my contention is that the prose of this article is neither. Allow me to give you just one more example: "... might be capable enough to rule over humanity". Awkward, laboured and clumsy would better describe such phrasing. Eric Corbett 10:25, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Eric Corbett: Thank you for the concern and comments. @Homeostasis07: Thank you for the help as well. Eric, I took this article through the GOCE and did several sweeps of the article myself. As the nominator, I cannot tell you if this is enough to violate 1a, but I thank you very much for the concerns. Feel free to address anything else in the article. AmericanAir88(talk) 02:02, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The GOCE are what they are, but they're not much use at this level of, what ought to be, a professional standard of writing. Eric Corbett 10:25, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Hassling good faith reviewers is just disruptive. Knock it off. SchroCat (talk) 16:04, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Speaking of "Awkward, laboured and clumsy"... what? Maury Markowitz (talk) 14:16, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not expecting you or anyone else to agree with me, I'm simply stating my opinion, which I thought was the purpose of a review. It's for the delegates to decide whether or nor to promote, not me, and they may well decide that my objections carry no weight. C'est la vie. Eric Corbett 14:50, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Rhetorical: what "purpose" does this serve? And one can easily oppose a nomination without insulting the good folks at GOCE. This is what counts as a "review" these days? C'est la FAC, more like. FFS. Homeostasis07 (talk) 22:43, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
It serves the purpose for which it's intended. And your rather transparent attempt to lure me into providing the odious Sandstein with yet another flimsy excuse to block me by asking does you no credit whatsoever. As for the GOCE, surely any fool can see its limitations? What purpose does your futile attempt to bully me into submission serve? An appearance at FAC invites criticism; if you can't tolerate criticism, don't ask for it. Sadly FAC is becoming a bit of a laughing stock because it is very likely that an inferior product like this nomination - which in the past would have stood no chance whatsoever of being promoted - likely will this time because too many are too afraid to oppose. For shame on you. Eric Corbett 23:26, 5 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Would you mind leaving personal attacks and insults outside of the FAC? Thanks. Maury Markowitz (talk) 00:46, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Not at all. Are you going to go first? Eric Corbett 13:04, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
What? Maury Markowitz (talk) 15:34, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Allow me to spell it out for you then. Address any future observations you may have to the review or to the article, not to me. Eric Corbett 16:14, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

SC edit

Oppose I have to agree with Eric that the text isn't as free-flowing and smooth as it could be; I'm not sure it demonstrates Wikipedia's very best work. Two months into an FAC and I'm still seeing some basic problems that should have been picked up some time ago (although I guess they could have been created during the FAC process). Anyway, so of the more egregious points are below, but this isn't an exhaustive list

Lead & IB
  • There is no reference in the article to support this being the 15th episode, as far as I can see
Done with regret. Many external links and references clearly state it, but I added a ref to satisfy your comment.
Why "with regret"? It wasn't mentioned at all in the body, which means it wasn't referenced anywhere in the body. Everything outside 'the sky is blue' has to be referenced. - SchroCat (talk) 21:01, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The episode was well-received, and many critics and fans praised it as one of the episodes of the series": so fans thought an episode in a series was an episode in a series?
Plot
  • Three "However"s at the beginning of sentences is at least two too many, possibly three
Production
  • Another "However" that isn't needed
Parodies
  • " 2001: A Space Odyssey": repeated twice in two sentences. "the film" would suffice for the second
  • "that shows Itchy tortures Scratchy" "torturing"
Reception
  • I've shrunk the image of Aldrin as it was breaking into the refs section and leaving a large amount of white space. Per the MoS this image should be on the left to avoid him facing away from the text, but a different image would probably be better (or a cropped version of this one)
Image on left. AmericanAir88(talk) 16:41, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
That is a cropped version (I cropped it before adding it to the article earlier in I believe this review). Would you recommend cropping it at the halfway mark of his torso, just above the book? If you have the time I do not mind if you crop it yourself either. Kees08 (Talk) 17:54, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • "British film magazine": does the nationality matter in the age of online publications? No other publication has its nationality up front
Sources and Bibliography
  • FN24 should be PP. not p.
  • Hersch isn't used as a reference and can be taken out. I cannot access the pages in question, but if there is something in there that isn't covered in the article, then think about including it.
Finding a use for it AmericanAir88(talk) 16:41, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

There are other bits that make the text less than easy on the eye (and GOCE isn't the best place to get a good copyedit: most couldn't copyedit their way out of a wet paper bag). – SchroCat (talk) 07:40, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@SchroCat: Thank you for your comments. I will address them as best as I can. Also, please do not criticize the GOCE. They are a group of dedicated editors who strive to create better flowing Wikipedia articles. Unless you have had a personal bad experience with them, I feel it is not right to criticize them. I wouldn't think the coordinators would like to hear that wet bag comment. They do a ton of good work for the encyclopedia. Everyone has the right to their own opinion though. AmericanAir88(talk) 16:29, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Everyone's entitled to their opinion so long as that opinion is that the GOCE does a good job? I suppose there's a kind of logic there, just one I'm unfamiliar with. Eric Corbett 17:22, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
AmericanAir88, you appear not to be aware that GOCE/LOCE is held by many in extremely low regard, with good reason, and many of those here will have had exclusively negative experiences with them. It's a couple of years old now, but I imagine most people's opinions of them haven't shifted substantially since this 2017 thread. The GOCE approach just about works for cleaning up very poor new articles, but on anything with any degree of complexity they almost invariably cause more damage than they fix. Coming to FAC with an attitude of "the GOCE know more than the FAC reviewers"—given that almost all the FAC reviewers are among Wikipedia's most experienced editors and most also have substantial off-wiki academic and writing experience whereas GOCE are generally enthusiastic amateurs who often aren't even familiar with the topic on which they're copyediting—is a fairly rapid way to antagonise a lot of people very quickly. ‑ Iridescent 18:40, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
↑↑↑↑↑ What they both said about GOCE. I am not criticising the individuals' approach or dedication, but they are not suited to copy editing FA-level material. OK for GA, but just not FA. AmericanAir88, it's a small thing, but please don't strike out my comments: I decide when you've dealt with them or not. When you've covered something, you should indent your comments underneath the point(s) and say you've done them, as you can see at this FAC: Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Mary Bell (aviator)/archive1. Thanks - SchroCat (talk) 19:21, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Mr rnddude edit

I noticed the discussion on WT:FAC, so decided to take a brief look at the article. I have a few prose and content comments:

... to fix a decrease in ... - Couldn't you just say "improve" here?
... leaves via a jetpack - Might be ENGVAR but "via jetpack" would work just fine.
Homer fails ... Homer accidentally ... - Repetitive sentence opener.
He based the episode on its NASA's cancellation of the Teacher in Space Project - I suspect "its" is a remnant and should be removed.
Aldrin however preferred the original line, which remained in the script - I think "remained" should be "was retained".
His recording session appears an extra ... - "appears an extra" should be "appears as an extra"
... on the DVD of the fifth season - Would it not be "DVD release"?
Barney regresses from being an athletic person to his usual drunken self by ingesting a non-alcoholic drink, while Homer is unable to complete the training exercises as a result of his withdrawal from alcohol - I was expecting a greater depth to this, but it's just a plot factoid. What's the significance of this statement?
... the relationships between the Simpson family ... - between "members of" the Simpson family.
... specifically how it evolves ... - Relationships is plural, so "it evolves" should be "they evolve".
This is evident when Homer and Bart are ... It's illustrated through that scene, but two people changing channels isn't evidence of anything beyond their personal non-interest.
... the viewing nature of society ... - I don't know what this is meant to mean.
"Deep Space Homer" is a part of the DVD and Blu-ray of the show's fifth season ... - Do episodes of a season usually get left out of seasonal releases? Also, "releases" again.
... commentary by Simpsons' ... + ... in the Simpsons: Risky Business ... - Definite articles (the) are used before Simpsons in some places but not in others, and there's not a pattern that I can identify to this.
... listing it as the third-best Simpsons movie parody - Given there is a Simpsons movie, this phrasing could cause confusion.
... IGN and Phoenix.com ... - Why is IGN italicized, but Phoenix.com not?
Hersch, Matthew (October 8, 2012). Inventing the American Astronaut. ISBN 978-1-137-02529-6. Retrieved February 8, 2018. Harv warning: There is no link pointing to this citation. The anchor is named CITEREFHersch2012. - Unused reference.

That's all that I've noticed through a brief skim. Mr rnddude (talk) 20:22, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose from Cassianto edit

Per the very good arguments presented by Eric. This article is not up to the standard that FAs should be. Was this even peer reviewed? CassiantoTalk

@Cassianto: I tried nominating it for peer review, but after months of no comments, I gave up. I decided to talk to users who opposed previously and see how I could fix the article. Thank you for the comments. AmericanAir88(talk) 20:57, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
I really do worry when I see people supporting articles like this at a FAC when they are a GA, at best. If I were you, I would close this nomination, jot down some of the names who opposed (including me), open a peer review and invite those names along to participate. Those worth their salt will turn up; no one here is opposing for the fun of it. CassiantoTalk 21:02, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Agreed. I would be happy to help at a peer review as well. Eric Corbett 21:11, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Cassianto: I have a feeling this will be closed soon due to other editors fighting. I won't withdraw it yet as I want to see what coordinators think of the whole situation.
Why prolong the agony? Knowing the coordinators as well as I do, I would be very surprised if they passed this particular nomination. CassiantoTalk 23:08, 6 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Questions edit

about this sentence:

Homer's space journey increased ratings for NASA, illustrating how easily trends in ratings can be effected by societal change.

1) What in the cited page in the cited source supports this?
2) Why is the word effected used here? Did you mean affected?
Kablammo (talk) 01:21, 7 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Coord note edit

I've been largely out of action the past 48 hours owing to a family illness and obviously a lot has happened in that time. Although I regret to see heated comments, I'm archiving the nom owing to legitimate/actionable opposition being raised in what is already a drawn-out review. I fully endorse Cass' suggestion to note the opposing voices and ping them for their input at a future PR. BTW, we can do without headers about opposing an oppose -- everyone is free to disagree with other's comments but we don't need to make a song and dance of it. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:47, 7 August 2019 (UTC)[reply]

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