Talk:Vanessa Z. Schneider

Latest comment: 1 month ago by Pokelego999 in topic Overall

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Vanessa Z. Schneider/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Nominator: Kung Fu Man (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 22:51, 20 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Will try to get this one done in the coming days. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 22:51, 20 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

@Kung Fu Man (talk · contribs)

Six Good Article Criteria edit

1. Prose is well written and is meeting guidelines.

2. There is no original research in the article, and everything is cited.

3. The subject is addressed in-depth from numerous sources in the article's Reception.

4. Article is neutral and does not attempt to take a stance on any particular topic.

5. Article appears stable. No controversial edits made in the past few days.

6. Article has two fair use media files, which have proper rationale guidelines.

Prose Review edit

Lead edit

-"She releases she's a clone" I assume this is meant to be realized?

Conception and design edit

-Nothing I can notice that's an issue here. Sourcing seems alright and properly cited.

Appearances edit

-Is the Aegis hyperlink necessary? I'm not sure if the two have any association.

Promotion and reception edit

-I feel the "hey she can dance quote" is unnecessary and can be summarized via prose.

-I feel the heavy emphasis on Gamesradar sources is a bit iffy. I personally see no problem with it, but I feel the emphasis on that many from one source may run afoul of other editors. I'd highly suggest either trimming a source or two off (Personally, I'd trim the one in the last paragraph and one of the three before it)

Overall edit

Article is overall very well written and has some very good sourcing. All this needs is a few touch-ups and it's good to go. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 23:12, 21 March 2024 (UTC)Reply

Done! Let me know if there are any other issues, the gamesradar bit got trimmed but I feel the other two paragraphs are probably fine.--Kung Fu Man (talk) 23:46, 21 March 2024 (UTC)Reply
Looks good to go! Happy to pass this article. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 00:14, 22 March 2024 (UTC)Reply