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Megan Lilja's edits - "She also has numerous other published works that are primarily in the fields of communication and feminist theory". - I like what you are trying to say, but this sentence with the previous one sounds somewhat chunky. If it could be re-worded, I think it would make for a stronger intro.

In the intro part I think that maybe the two paragraphs could be flip flopped. Have her basic information first (where she was born, etc) and then follow up with what she is known for.

Retirement statement twice a bit redundant

Great picture and I like the comment under it, just maybe center it? I don’t know if that is an option or not

"There, she graduated in 1974 with degrees in both Journalism and Humanities" - Possible to reword this? Maybe “There she received degrees on Journalism and Humanities, graduating in 1974” - obviously, it doesn’t have to be that, but just so it reads better.

"Dr. Rakow’s long-term career as a professor and researcher at the University of Wisconsin-Parkside where she was an assistant professor from 1896 – 1890" <- I’m guessing you just mixed the numbers up!!

Finally, she returned to the University of North Dakota, … Maybe don’t use the word finally, since she isn’t dead. Could be reworded as “She finished” or “She then”, just an idea.

Have you thought of citing the information within the article? So the little numbers pop up and bring you down to the citations? - not sure if that is a requirement or not, but just an idea!

Overall I think this is a great first draft! There is a lot of good information, with just some parts of it needing re-wording. I think with a little more work, this will be great. Good first start.

Melissa's peer edits

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First off, I like the layout you have going on! Looks very professional.

For the first section, I like that you immediately establish her notoriety, but I also think that it feels a little rushed. Maybe you want to mention her birthplace or something general first and then move into her work just so it seems a little more like a timeline? Just a suggestion. Also for this section, I think it would be beneficial to explain what/where the Journalism and Mass Communication Quarterly is/located.

Education and Career section: I think it needs to be "Ph.D."

For the third paragraph, first sentence of this section, things seem unclear. I think you meant to say "was at the U of W-P? and then also I would add a comma after U of W-P. Also I noticed the dates must be off- I think you meant 1986-1990 for her as assistant professor? But back to the first sentence, I think it is throwing off the entire paragraph because due to the timeline of her work, I would think that her "long-term" university would be at UND instead not at U of W-P? I hope I am making sense here. Other than that the layout of this section is a really clear timeline of her work!

Scholarly Work section: Looks really good. As a suggestion, you might want to add something along the line of "Dr. Rakow also had other notable work such as:" with a list to follow.

Honors and Awards section: Maybe explain some of her major awards as in what they mean or why they are noteworthy? Other than that, I think this section is clear and simple!

Overall, I think this is clear and informative! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Melissafritz (talkcontribs) 02:30, 7 April 2017 (UTC)Reply


Nice set of editing suggestions! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aburnett412 (talkcontribs) 02:05, 26 April 2017 (UTC)Reply