Talk:LYFE Kitchen

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Rick305 in topic Company information out of date

Comments on recent article expansion

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Broadly, looks very good. You've cited nicely (i.e. for the sentences that I reviewed, you'd placed the cite at the end of the string of sentences that it is covering (and it really does cover them - not always a given here!), rather than doing repeat cites for each sentence). You've not over wikilinked. Your sourcing looks to be reliable too; there are some press releases being used, which is generally not a good idea.

The Global Animal Partnership point needs a cite (immediately after the comma), as there's no mention of LYFE on the cite at the end of the sentence. Funnily enough, this is something that a press release (e.g. this) might reasonably be used for, if you can't find it in a normal 3rd party source.

I'd trim the lead. Not remove, but move much of it to the body. Personally I'd do that for everything other than the first sentence, but others may feel differently.

The tone of the article is a little promotional (i.e. we probably don't need know that unfried chicken is their best seller and the use of some of the sentence openers, like In addition, each LYFE Kitchen . . . is unnecessary). It also goes into too much detail (i.e. To facilitate easier local sourcing, LYFE alternates menu items seasonally, such as their Brussels sprouts being substituted with asparagus in the spring and summer months. Menu items also vary regionally: Colorado menus feature bison burgers and tacos, Texas has a larger variety of Tex-Mex fare, and New York introduced more predominately Asian-influenced dishes.).

Likewise, it relies too much on quotes. This - We chose Palo Alto because of the people, because of the innovative spirit here. Because a lot of early adopters to movements that move across the country start here in California. We can get our produce here fresh, local, organic, hormone-free, antibiotic-free, all within a hundred miles of Palo Alto - is, for example, not necessary.

Anyway, all this is just my opinion. Hope it helps. Bromley86 (talk) 16:56, 8 December 2014 (UTC)Reply

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Company information out of date

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I would appreciate some help in getting this page up to date. The company has undergone numerous changes since the last update and the information provided is no longer accurate. Naj42181 (talk) 22:29, 8 January 2018 (UTC) Naj42181 (talk) 22:29, 8 January 2018 (UTC)Reply

I would be happy to help, but I would need some concrete change proposals from you. I do not have the time to go out and do the research for you, but I can certainly get any proposed changes reviewed and implemented. ~ Rick305 t·c 23:29, 8 January 2018 (UTC)Reply