Talk:Jan Reimer

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Somebody with an encyclopedic talent needs to add something about the beaver pelt incident, and possibly about her role in the Keillor Road scandal.

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Good article review

1. Well Written: Fail. In general solid prose but the lead section is weak - the sentence on the sports team does not make sense and the rest does not read that well. Could be expanded to a couple of paragraphs to give a better overview of what is to come in the rest of the article. (See Wikipedia:Manual of Style (biographies)). You could explain what an alderman is, briefly, for those outside Canada. There are also numerous other sentences that don't really make sense on their own. E.g: "Reimer attempted to make use of the council's Executive Committee to advance her agenda, but was criticized for this by alderman and former ally Patricia MacKenzie." HOW did she make use of this committee to this end and WHY was she criticised?
2. Factually accurate and verifiable: Pass. Good referencing. See 4, however.
3. Broad in coverage: Pass.
4. Neutrality: Fail. As noted above, the referencing is good but several sections seem to be putting a subtle but persistently positive spin on everything Reimer does. The main criticism of her by Terry Cavanagh is couched in such a way as to make it look like political point scoring (it may well be, but the point remains this is the only substantive criticism of her). This article needs the language moderated in sections and perhaps more of a critique of her performance in each of her roles. The mayoral section in particular seems to read "she tried to do [X] but was prevented by [the nefarious behaviour of opposition politicians]". One of the most interesting possible sections - why she lost in 1995 - merits less than one sentence.
5. Stability: Pass
6. Illustrated by images: Pass. Ideally, however this would have a picture for Reimer. Perhaps some other free image relevant to the topic?

Please address these matters soon and then leave a note here showing how they have been resolved. After 48 hours the article should be reviewed again. If these issues are not addressed within 7 days, the article may be failed without further notice. Thank you for your work so far. TreveX^talk 22:38, 17 May 2008 (UTC)

Failed GA nomination. Issues not addressed in time. TreveX^talk 17:25, 29 May 2008 (UTC)