Talk:Anna Pavignano

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): LANA.Film. Peer reviewers: Carrot47, ThatOneGal, Mturta, AuBeYeux, NourHalouani.

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Peer Review

This article is solid with a lot of information and a clear structure. The content is neutral and there are good sources as "Women Screenwriter An International Guide" that I use myself for my own article.

Something I'm concern about is her filmography list. As you said, she worked with other writer in her life. That is why I'd do a list for her work as a writer and another for her work with other people. — Preceding unsigned comment added by AuBeYeux (talk • contribs) 23:51, 13 March 2016 (UTC)

Modifications & Suggestions

This is a great article! You have done a remarkable amount of research into Anna Pavignano s’ career life. The paragraph is described in a well-organized manner; it also included important details pertinent to her career life.

I have a few recommendations that might help in ameliorating your article. I believe that it would bring more depth to this article if you elaborate more on the personal life of Pavignano, because it will create a better picture of this person’s past and who she was before she becomes a screenwriter. Also, I would like to point out that the sources you have cited are broad, and this will help you gain a better objective perspective into Anna Pavignanos’ life. I would like to also suggest you write a brief summary introducing your screenwriter, this will give your article a lead (a starting point). Overall, this is a good article, and I think that those suggestions might help you improve your article to some extent.

I wish you the best and I hope my recommendations will help

NourHalouani (talk) 03:48, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

→ The article is good, but I feel that some formulation could be reworked. The flow is a little weird to me. There is also some spelling/grammar mistake (eg . "worked on television shows to pay for her study", unless she really worked on one television show). As for the references, two of them bring us on the main page of the website instead of where you found the information, it would be a good idea to fix that. Otherwise, good work! Mturta (talk) 20:56, 18 March 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hi! I just finished reviewing your article and I think it's really solid and you did some great work! Here are some of my recommendations and comments:

• I would suggest using more "objective" (sorry I can't think of a better word) like wikipedia language, what I mean is to write more as if you are presenting information about like a history or something as in "she met the actor, director and screenwriter..." rather than "meets"
• you can also say they began their relationship rather than "she found love", just little things
• you can actually take out where you say how Trosi died because it seems subjective and doesn't really relate to her career
• when you talk about her book you can say it is a semi-autobigraphy since it's based on her own life
• great job with adding her filmography divided into what is collaborative and what is not, also in adding the table with the awards she received
• the awards section can be a section of its own
• great sources and lots of information! your article is very detailed and is very well laid out

Carrot47 (talk) 18:12, 22 March 2016 (UTC)