Talk:Angrej

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Numerounovedant in topic GA Review
Good articleAngrej has been listed as one of the Media and drama good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
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Angrej directed by Simerjit Singh is a well made, ambrosial Punjabi flick which not only satiates the craving of Punjabi Cine audience but is a prima facie example that Punjabi Cinema is evolving in stature with time. For my detailed review, please visit.............http://rohitmoviereview.blogspot.in/ — Preceding unsigned comment added by 122.173.144.23 (talk) 08:55, 5 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

Box office section cut edit

Hi Numerounovedant, was there a specific reason why you cut the entire box office section in this edit? Box office sections aren't typically 1 sentence long (note Captain America: Civil War#Box office.) Also, from a quality standpoint one-sentence content doesn't usually warrant a unique section. Anyhow, though I haven't reverted your edit, I don't see how that change was a substantial improvement, aside from the removal of "second greatest hit movie" puffery. Thanks and regards, Cyphoidbomb (talk) 16:31, 23 February 2018 (UTC)Reply

Hey Cyphoidbomb, I am gonna work on the section with better sources. Some of the sources from the previous version weren't RS. I'll get to this soon? VedantTalk 16:35, 23 February 2018 (UTC)Reply
@Numerounovedant: OK. Thanks for the response. I'll get off your back about it.   Cyphoidbomb (talk) 02:58, 24 February 2018 (UTC)Reply

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Angrej/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:24, 13 March 2018 (UTC)Reply


I'll review this soon. Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:24, 13 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Thank you Yash! VedantTalk 13:26, 13 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Lead

  • On it.
  • "Angrej had Ammy Virk, Binnu Dhillon,.." Till now, the article was in present tense.
  • I feel you can trim the unnecessary details about some Goreyan Nu Daffa Karo in the lead.
  • I think it's significant as that is the only way of putting a timeline on it.
  • "Production designer Raashid Rangrez paid particular attention to the film's sets and costumes as he wanted them to best represent the Punjab of the 1940s." I feel the last bit can be rephrased.
  • In the lead its 'A Rhythm Boys', but in the infobox its 'A Rhythm Boyz'.

Plot

  • Remove the actors name from brackets, as it eats unnecessary space. We have the cast section for that.
  • "He tells his mother of his intentions to marry Maado; she is overwhelmed by his son's indecent behaviour, but Angrej's sister-in-law agrees to arrange for the marriage." This sentence could be split in half.
  • ".he is caught by Maado's father, who is furious". --> he is caught by Maado's furious father.
  • Delink Lahore, per WP:OLINK and link partial paralysis.
  • Is the wooden radio bit important for the plot?
  • Yes, it was one of the luxurious gifts that was used to highlight the financial gap.
  • Be consistent with the name, Dhann Kaur or Dhan Kaur.
  • doesn't love --> doesnot love.
  • Instead of continuosly writting Dhann Kaur, you can mention her as simply 'Kaur'.

Yashthepunisher (talk) 13:32, 15 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Fixed the rest Yash. VedantTalk 16:15, 15 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Production

  • Simerjit Singh was later hired to direct the film; he was assisted by Amrit Raj Chadda. Who is Amrit Raj Chadda and what's the relevance to mention an assistant director here?
  • Removed.
  • I believe 'e' in Englishman shouldn't be in caps.
  • I believe it is, it's a proper noun like any other.
  • "The former said that the film's title, Angrej, which roughly translates to "Englishman" was used by the people of British Punjab to label someone whose thoughts were ahead of their times." Provide proper attribution here.
Here?
I am sorry Yash, what do you mean by attribution? From what I see everything has been properly attributed. VedantTalk 15:48, 17 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
I mean the quotes should be under inverted comma's. Yashthepunisher (talk) 18:42, 17 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • "Gill said that it was challenging task to find the right actresses to play Maado and Dhan Kaur. Aditi Sharma and debutante Sargun Mehta, who according to him suited the characters unbelievably well". Again.
Here again? Still not fixed. Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:03, 17 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • "Sharma said that she always wanted to work in a Punjabi film and was attracted to Angrej's script and it's "old world charm"." I guess.
  • Yes, "its".
  • "Mehta, who made her feature film debut with the film was offered the role by Amberdeep Singh."
  • "..as the production team wanted to "depict life sans electric poles, mobile towers and modern-day lifestyle". What is life sans?
  • it means life without electric... .
  • Is the link to set construction necessary?
  • I mean why not? Set construction is as significant for the project as is for any other period drama.
  • Props is informal, use 'property'.
  • "Costumes, which included punjabi wedding attire were made of khadi handloom fabric." Comma after wedding attire.
  • The cloth was brought from cities including Banaras, Bikaner, and Jalandhar. It's pretty obvious that they are cities.
  • Well, not so much for a non-Indian reader, but I've removed it anyway. They are wiki-linked for the curious lot.

Yashthepunisher (talk) 06:23, 17 March 2018 (UTC) Fixed, Yash. VedantTalk 08:42, 17 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

  • The rest seems fine. Once the above raised issues are fixed. This article shall pass! Yashthepunisher (talk) 12:08, 17 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • Fixed Everything Yash, thank you for taking up the review. I appreciate all the help with the article. Also, do watch the film any chance you get! VedantTalk 11:00, 18 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

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