Talk:Woman VI

Latest comment: 9 years ago by Aolivex in topic Organization

Peer Review

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Jinghan,

I think your articles are coming along very nicely! You have clearly done a lot of research, and it shows in your writing. I really liked that you linked to the pages of some major concepts and important phrases that people might not necessarily know a lot about and want to reference for context as they are reading your article. (Examples: decolonization, the McCarthy era) I would continue to do that throughout your articles. I also liked the way you split up the article - each subtopic/heading is relevant and the overall flow of the article is coherent and easy to follow. One thing I would suggest would be to combine the headings of Artist and Abstract Expressionism, because you don't have a lot of text at the moment under either of those headings, and de Kooning was an Abstract Expressionist, so it would definitely be easy to and make sense to consolidate those paragraphs. I would also be careful to do a spelling and grammar check in your sandbox (if that's possible) before moving to the main-space, as I noticed some minor spelling and grammar errors. Otherwise, this page is looking great!

Richathanyou (talk) 23:57, 24 March 2015 (UTC)Reply

Notability

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If de Kooning painted a whole series of "Women," why single this one out for an article? The lede does not provide significant justification for this. Recommend using this article as a basis to develop an article on the "Woman" series as a whole. Aolivex (talk) 18:45, 25 April 2015 (UTC)Reply

Organization

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This article has several problems with organization:

  • several sections appear to be irrelevant to the central topic
  • the flow of sections is neither unified nor logical
  • the "visual analysis" section reads like a long list; recommend integrating it into a discussion of the painting's importance, or striking. Aolivex (talk) 18:48, 25 April 2015 (UTC)Reply