Talk:Unihertz

Latest comment: 5 months ago by 68.70.145.248 in topic Page reads like an ad

Page reads like an ad edit

With words like 'innovative' and 'stylish', this page reads like an ad. I'm not experienced in editing Wikipedia, so I'm not sure what to do about it. Thomasberends (talk) 17:46, 26 May 2023 (UTC)Reply

I just added the warning for "reads like an ad". Maybe a good first step would be to remove the buzzwords? Hamsterdamn (talk) 09:27, 3 October 2023 (UTC)Reply
I am also a beginner, but in light of Wikipedia's Be Bold editing guideline I have opted to begin the buzzword cleanup process.
For anyone interested in continuing this work, I would add that I believe I was in fact not very bold in my editing itself as I did not have much time in that moment, I can in fact see that I missed a buzzword near the end of the article. I see some entire sentences that could be rewritten, but with motivation to "get the ball rolling" I kept my editing to buzzword removal and grammar/vocabulary improvement.
I will gladly edit more boldly at another moment, with more time. 68.70.145.248 (talk) 17:32, 1 December 2023 (UTC)Reply