Talk:Ulpia Severina

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 04:51, 18 November 2021 (UTC)

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 04:51, 18 November 2021 (UTC)

Criteria

GA Criteria
GA Criteria: 1 1.a Y 1.b Y 2 2.a Y 2.b Y 2.c Y 2.d Y 3 3.a Y 3.b Y 4 4.a Y 5 5.a Y 6 6.a Y 6.b Y

• No DAB links Y
• No dead links Y
• No missing citations Y

Discussion

• A 2000 edition of Vagi gives some more details of Ulpia you may wish to include, or may exclude per UNDUE. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:00, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Prose Suggestions

Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

• Her nomen Ulpia suggests that she may have been from Dacia, where the name was common, and perhaps related either to Emperor Trajan (r. 98–117) or the usurper Laelianus (r. 269) you may wish to reverse these, to Her nomen Ulpia suggests that she may have been related either to Emperor Trajan (r. 98–117) or the usurper Laelianus (r. 269), as they share the same nomen, and perhaps from Dacia, where the name was common.

Done. Ichthyovenator (talk) 16:29, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Life

• Suggest making this "early life" or "early life and family"

Done. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:35, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

• Perhaps Severina was related to the usurper Laelianus suggest Severina may have been related to the usurper Laelianus. (and add evidence if source gives it; I can't access Vagi.)

Changed to your suggestion. Vagi doesn't give any evidence beyond the Ulpia-Ulpius connection. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:35, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

• coinciding with Aurelian's triumph may wish to give some details, such as why the triumph was performed, if the event is known (from memory I believe the Palmyerene and Gallic Empires' defeat?)

Yeah, it's the defeat of the Palmyrene and Gallic empires. Added. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:35, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Interregnum

• worried as they were complicit in Aurelian's murder give a short explanation for how this is so after Aurelian died in September or October 275

Added the disappointing context of his death. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:35, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

• @Ichthyovenator: That is all of my suggestions. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 21:23, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

@Iazyges: Thank you for reviewing! I've addressed all the comments. Ichthyovenator (talk) 22:35, 22 November 2021 (UTC)