Talk:Tropical Storm Flossie (2013)

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 00:59, 3 January 2014 (UTC) Hello, TropicalAnalystwx13. I will be reviewing Tropical Storm Flossie (2013). TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 00:59, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

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Lead

• Check the alt text for the infobox image. 'Satellite imagery' → 'Satellite image'
  •  Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "Tracking westward across the Atlantic with little development, it tracked over Central America..." – Find a way to not use forms of 'track' close together.
  •  Done while you were doing the review. :) TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "In addition, numerous flash flood watches were issued in the fear of over a foot of precipitation." – Optional, but you really don't need that 'the'.
  • Removed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "...this also made it the first tropical cyclone to directly affect Hawaii in two decades." – What does that mean? Hurricane Flossie (2007) brought high waves and rain to the island.
  • Reworded. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "Gusty winds exceeded tropical storm threshold..." – SSHWS is based on maximum sustained winds, not gusts.
  • That doesn't change anything? TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "...many thousand locals were without power for a few days." – It's either 'several thousand' or 'many thousands of locals', not 'many thousand'
  • Changed to several thousand. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "...and several others because of vehicle accidents." – You sure? The article only mentions that accidents occurred, not accidents occurred and injured people. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 00:59, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
  • Good catch, removed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

Meteorological history

• Try naming your references. It's good practice and can help eliminate a lot of byte-age.
  •  Don't see the point. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• Link 'satellite intensity estimates' to Dvorak technique
  •  Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "...intermittently on visible satellite imagery by early on July 27." – I think you meant infrared imagery.
  • Nah, I mean visible satellite imagery. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "...began to impede on the system's organization..." – You don't need 'on'
  • Removed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "...the forecast called for continued to weakening..." – Eh? Fix the sentence structure up.
  • Lol, removed the "to". TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "The low-level vortex became exposed to view..." – Who's view? You can always see the low-level vortex from a boat beneath the storm, right?
  • Don't ask me, the NHC uses the phrase. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

Preparations and impact

• "...under a watch." ought to be spelled out as tropical storm watch
  •  Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "Along the Big Island, all courts and colleges were closed." – Just clarifying, but courts = justice courts?
  • The reference does not clarify. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "Upon becoming the first storm to directly hit the state in 20 years..." – The reference only anticipates a direct hit, so, it can't be used to cite that Flossie did. Direct hits have a special meaning in meteorology, so that counts, too.
  • The reference is for the 20 years part. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "...concentrated in Maui and Hawaii." – You should say 'Big Island' instead of Hawaii.
  • Changed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "Damage from lightning across the state amounted to $24,000." – What's with the reference clutter after this sentence? You could've easily just done a search for lightning in Hawaii on (dates) and then the $24,000 total would show up. Besides, $24,000 shows up on all of the references already anyways; you can remove 3 of the 4 references there.
  • Removed three of the instances. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
• "Six accidents were reported..." – What accidents? TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 00:59, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
  • Vehicle accidents. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:16, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

About

Look, I don't know the entirety of their reason for wanting a redirect, but they do it so the project may be better maintained. What more need I say? It doesn't really matter how stupid it is if it helps maintain the project. I think part of it has to do with the ways bots index the pages or something; just look and read through. I am done with this. I will admit I didn't need to say "trash it", though. In any case, United States Man, I don't think we should make exceptions to the preference to link to a page with "disambiguation" without a specific reason. Sorry if this seemed like a brief revert war; we should have discussed first. Dustin (talk) 14:33, 9 June 2014 (UTC)

Where do you get all this about "doing it so the project may be better maintained". I'd like to know where that comes from and why you think this makes any difference. United States Man (talk) 14:49, 9 June 2014 (UTC)

Okay, it doesn't have to do with indexing. There are other reasons, though, some of which may be found at User:RussBot#About the hatnote task; please just look next time I ask. Dustin (talk) 14:57, 9 June 2014 (UTC)

Like the maintainer of the bot said, why not link to a redirect? Linking to redirects is in no way inferior to linking the page directly, so if it helps to save editors time, then why not. I don't want to seem like I am getting too into this or something; I was just unhappy that the IP reverted me without actually going to RussBot's page despite my asking. So like earlier, no hard feelings, I hope. Dustin (talk) 15:04, 9 June 2014 (UTC)

Okay. Fine with me. Just wanted to know where you were getting that. United States Man (talk) 15:14, 9 June 2014 (UTC)

@United States Man: Thank you for looking at the link, and sorry if I am seeming too rough in my comments. I realize that I may not have been clear enough when I asked for you and the IP to look at RussBot's page, and I could have toned down my wording a bit as well. Dustin (talk) 15:21, 9 June 2014 (UTC)

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