Talk:Shin-Yeoseong

Latest comment: 1 year ago by KoreanArtHistory.. in topic peer review responses

peer review responses

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To Conceptcontext:

Thank you for your valuable feedbacks! Somethings I will fix are:

-adding images

-double check my neutrality and tones especially in my content background section

-have a Lead section

-instead of citations at the end, I will move them to each sentences to make it more clear where I got each evidence from

-pay attention to past and present tenses

-adding information on how Shin-Yeoseong was critiqued or created critiques


To Morwenna782:

You said my content is neutral and informative but the other user said it seems biased and persuasive, so I will have to get another opinion on that and actively keep that in mind. Thank you for your comments.

Somethings I will add/keep in mind while editing:

-have a brief description of what the article will be about in the introduction/lead section

-improve: [In the Content Background section, in the sentence starting with "The Japanese government systematically..." the wording, "...this idea in the official women's idea after..." on confusing. I don't really understand what you mean.] so I know for sure readers can understand them.

-italicize title of the magazine

-correct typo

-add images

KoreanArtHistory.. (talk) 18:51, 26 April 2023 (UTC)KoreanArtHistory.. (talk) 18:50, 26 April 2023 (UTC)Reply