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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
I've done a couple minor fixes, but there are some suggestions below.
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"Critical reception towards the song was generally mixed to positive." -- Probably should get rid of generally.
"However, the song's lyrics were met with mixed reaction." -- We shouldn't repeat "mixed" so soon. How about "However, critics were of disparate opinions on the song's lyrics" or "However, critics were divided regarding the song's lyrics."
Formerly or originally titled "Pretty Girls"? To me, formerly implies that it was released under the name. Perhaps (titled "Pretty Girls" during production) or something similar.
""a lighter-than-air jump-rope rhyme about how hot she [Keri] is."" -- Wouldn't it just be better to write ""a lighter-than-air jump-rope rhyme about how hot [Keri] is.""?
""four minutes of schoolyard singsong about her [Keri's] fabulousness."" -- Same thing, ""four minutes of schoolyard singsong about [Keri's] fabulousness.""
"Hilson told Kahn that she did not want the video to be about her, since she felt that the song was very much about herself." -- Perhaps "Hilson told Kahn that she did not want the video to be about her, since she felt that the song was already very much about herself."
"Jessica Letkemann of Billboard magazine wrote that the band performed "the super self-assured R&B strut of Keri Hilson's 'Pretty Girl Rock' into a sweet, poppy acoustic rock bounce."" -- I don't think you can 'perform' something into something else. Perhaps "Jessica Letkemann of Billboard magazine wrote that the band transformed "the super self-assured R&B strut of Keri Hilson's 'Pretty Girl Rock' into a sweet, poppy acoustic rock bounce.""
What are the standards for writing about costumes? I've noticed that the ones on Rihanna's songs tend to have information on what she was wearing, but it seems that it is much more prevalent in this article.
It gives readers a further description of her performances. Most GA articles would have it as well. Oztalk 00:54, 8 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
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File:Janet Jackson.jpg (the source of your derivative montage) should have better crediting. The source is Flickr, not Jackson. Other than that, the images seem to check out.
I have to go out for breakfast, so I'm not done yet. Almost though! Crisco 1492 (talk) 00:26, 8 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
Alright, this is mostly done. I still want to do a paraphrasing and DAB check later. Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:15, 8 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
The Rianz reference is down. Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:27, 8 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
The NZ Singles Chart archives are not working at the moment, should I add the Citation needed template instead? Oztalk 02:35, 8 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
It would keep this on hold; hiding the information cited to the reference would allow it to pass until the archives are working or another reference can be found. Crisco 1492 (talk) 02:40, 8 December 2011 (UTC)Reply