Talk:Joe Warbrick

GA Review

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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 17:01, 17 August 2014 (UTC)

I see this this have waited for a long time for a review. exactly 99 days to be precise. Well, I'm going to start the review before it turns 100. Just give me a couple of days as this is pretty long.  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 17:01, 17 August 2014 (UTC)

Cheers. Thanks for picking up the review. Don't feel rushed, I'm happy for you to take your time. -- Shudde ^talk 10:40, 18 August 2014 (UTC)

• The lead states that Warbrick appeared in 21 matches in Britain while later it states, "had played 74 matches in Britain, but due to injury Warbrick only appeared in 14"
  • The lead states "Although the team played 107 matches, including 74 in the British Isles, due to injury Warbrick played only 21 matches." -- hopefully this is clear that it means he played in 21 of 107, not 21 of 74. If not let me know and I'll try to clarify. -- Shudde ^talk 10:24, 22 August 2014 (UTC)
• Avoid using "a number of"
  • Done
• as public servant - should be "as a public servant" (tell me if I'm wrong)
  • fixed
• his old province - sounds a bit weird.
  • perfectly okay in New Zealand English -- think "his old team" or "his old club" -- both make sense and this is the same.
• wikilink New South Wales
  • Done
• and that year captained them - what?
  • Think this is ok. Think "and that year led them".
• "for conducting the tour, for Eyton and Scott profit was the major motivation" - sounds a bit weird.
  • I think as part of the sentence "Although Warbrick had chiefly sporting reasons for conducting the tour, for Eyton and Scott profit was the major motivation." this reads ok.
• "and when the team departed New Zealand in August." I think it should be a comma.
  • Think I've fixed this.
• "November 1888" - is it possible to add the day?
  • The source does not specify the exact date that Pie Wynyard joined the team.
• "strong Auckland side" - no "strong"
  • Is there a reason? The source calls the Auckland side "formidable" and does explain why.
• "several bones" - does it state how much?
  • No sorry.
• "but his form was poor" - change to "but his form was still poor"
  • Done.
• wikilink "Victoria"
  • Done
• "Considering that Joe won his cap in 1877, it must be very pleasing..." the quote needs a ref.
  • Done
• "It was in 1903," - should be "It was in 30 August 1903,"
  • Done
• "good as any ever seen" - should be "good as any have ever seen" or something like that.
  • have fixed this

That's all. If any of the grammar issues are actually correct, tell me. I'm not the best at grammar. I'm still learning. Cheers,  ΤheQ Editor  ^Talk? 18:45, 21 August 2014 (UTC)

@TheQ Editor: Thanks for the review. I've addressed your comments where applicable and left comments above for the others. Hopefully this is satisfactory. Let me know if there is anything further you'd like me to do. -- Shudde ^talk 10:24, 22 August 2014 (UTC)

@Shudde: Well done. Pass

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