Talk:Jochen Dornbusch

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Acabashi in topic Restructure 06 Jan 2011

Restructure 06 Jan 2011

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I have compacted and typo-ed this article for a tighter read, without altering the main drift or salient information, as a response to the ‘article issues’ tag. The only things essentially changed are 1: the removal of “a position he has held for a number of years” – too vague, 2: the removal of “there is a system where promising riders are selected” – does Germany have a special system, then name, describe and reference it, and 3: the separation of eastern and western Germany – unnecessary, particularly when we are not sure from the text of the locations of the sports centres, and as the article doesn’t explain that this geographical separation has any bearing on the subject. I have also added Wiki links. If by rationalizing the text the facts are now skewed, apologies, but this shows how slightly confusing the article was in the first place. This article still needs more (in fact some) info and cites etc. Acabashi (talk) 12:38, 6 January 2011 (UTC)Reply

I have now added a stub for this article Acabashi (talk) 10:44, 7 January 2011 (UTC)Reply