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Sports bios usually have a paragraph on the player's early life. It could be a separate section, or just included at the start of the Early Career section. Family, first interest in Football, that sort of thing. This article might be a source.[1]
[coached by former North Melbourne player David King, where under his guidance he won the best and fairest] A bit awkward, how about "coached by former North Melbourne player David King; under his guidance Macrae won the best and fairest"
[46 point semi-finals win] Should be hyphenated as "46-point win", unless the grammar is different for Australian sports. Based on a quick search, it looks like the hyphen is standard in Australia for point margins. There are too many instances like this in the article for me to list them all; if you agree they need changing, can I suggest that you use ctrl+f, search for "point" and correct them that way?
["You have to earn your right to play senior footy and first of all you have got to train well and prepare well,"] Full stop at the end of this quote, rather than a comma.
[Just two rounds later, Macrae was again named best on ground in the team's 2 point win over Richmond just two rounds later in Round 3.] Repetition of "just two rounds later".
[He was kept out of the team for the next two rounds, despite a 37 disposal, 6 tackle game for the reserves team.] I'd suggest swapping "the next two rounds" for "the 8th round", as his strong reserves performance presumably happened too late to give him a shot at playing in Round 7, however good it was?
[Despite placing second in the best and fairest voting the previous year,] This fact should instead be in the previous chapter, as it pertains to the 2014 season.
[In Round 12 he had a hamstring scare, but managed to play the next week without missing the game.] I think you can drop "without missing the game", as that's already implied.
[Just like Round 14,] No need to refer back to Round 14, as this was established in the previous sentence. I'd suggest "In Round 15," instead (or whichever round number this is).
[This game would see him kickstart consecutive Brownlow vote winning performances from Round 20 - 23, greatly pushing him into Brownlow Medal contention.] A little confusing, as Round 19 was also part of the run. How about, "This game would see him kickstart a run of five consecutive Brownlow vote winning performances, greatly pushing him into Brownlow Medal contention."
[Macrae was also named as the Bulldogs' best in their disapponting Elimination Finals loss to Greater Western Sydney,] Wikilink Elimination Finals loss.
In the fourth paragraph of this section, there's one group of five consecutive citations, and another of four. Going by Wikipedia:Citation overkill, you don't need more than two for this, as it's non-controversial information.
[establishing himself as one of the most impressive players in the game that season] A bit subjective - the list of awards in the next paragraph speaks for itself, I think?
Done - Good point you've made here, I've decided to just remove the line altogether.
[he wore his number at the Bulldogs, number 11.] Not sure this is noteworthy. Needs a capital H if you keep it in.
[Fellow Bulldogs Caleb Daniel and Marcus Bontempelli were also named.] This isn't needed in an article about Macrae (Daniel and Bontempelli have their own articles).
That should be about everything done Harper J. Cole - Let me know if it needs anymore fixing. If it does, I may take a few days to do so as I am going away for 3 days. Thanks very much for doing such a quick job on this review! Doggo375 (talk) 06:07, 8 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
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Done Doggo375 (talk) 07:15, 3 July 2021 (UTC)
Semi-done - I've re-worded that part of the sentence to make a bit more sense than it was previously. Doggo375 (talk) 00:18, 6 July 2021 (UTC)