Talk:Gunay Mammadzada

Latest comment: 2 years ago by GhostRiver in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Gunay Mammadzada/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:52, 25 October 2021 (UTC)Reply


I'll be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 21:52, 25 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Infobox and lede edit

  • "at the European Team Championship in 2019." → "at the latter in 2019."

Early life and background edit

  • Information about her younger brother should probably be in Personal life
  • "Mammadzada began playing chess at five years old. She became interested in the game from watching her grandparents play recreationally." → "Mammadzada began playing chess at five years old, having become interested in the game from watching her parents play professionally."

Chess career edit

2009-14 edit

  • FIDE rating through the International Chess Federation (FIDE) Kind of awkward to have the acronym come after its first introduction
    • Moved the introduction of the acronym to the very first sentence of the article instead. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Comma after "higher-rated Russian players"
  • Comma after "She scored 5/9 at the former event"
  • Three sentences in a row in the second paragraph begin with 'She"; the middle one can probably be changed to "Mammadzada"
  • Comma after "record by Turkan Mamedyarova"

2015-present edit

  • "in February" → "that February"
  • "she defeated two Grandmasters in Valentina Gunina who was rated 2509 and Koneru Humpy who was rated 2577." → "she defeated two Grandmasters: Valentina Gunina, who was rated 2509, and Koneru Humpy, who was rated 2577."
  • "in for the last leg" only "in" or "for" should be included
  • Move "despite being the third-lowest rated player out of twelve in the field" to before "She had an excellent result in the round-robin tournament". When I first read it as is, I was confused why she was the third-lowest but had an "excellent" result; reordering will help understand the flow in this way

National representation edit

  • "to finish in fifth place on the second board behind only male players." → "to finish in fifth place on the second board, the highest place of any female entrant."
    • I'd rather leave it because I feel like alternate ways to write it don't make it clear that it's just among players on the second board (not all of the players in the whole tournament). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:49, 29 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Playing style edit

  • "described Mammadzada's strengths as "Gunay has a nice opening knowledge and strong nerves".

Personal life edit

  • "Mammadzada's chess idol is Magnus Carlsen, and her other childhood chess idol was Judit Polgár." → "Mammadzada's chess idol is Magnus Carlsen, and she has also named Judit Polgár. as an inspiration." (best guess from the machine translation about how to get at the heart of what you're trying to say without repeating "chess idol")

References edit

  • Very good!

General comments edit

  • All pictures used are CC and relevant
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Earwig score looks great at 2.9%

Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and please let me know when you're finished. — GhostRiver 00:47, 26 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the review, GhostRiver! I addressed everything above, agreed with most things. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:52, 29 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Re-pinging GhostRiver because I think I messed up the ping the first time. Apologies if you get notified twice. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:58, 29 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
Thank you for making those changes, passing now! — GhostRiver 01:24, 31 October 2021 (UTC)Reply