Talk:Arthur Batcheller

Revisions

It is obvious that you spent a lot of time researching and curating the information for this page, it was really nicely organized and detailed! I only made a few small grammar revisions and restructured some sentences to make the sections flow more smoothly. The infobox is very informative! I might include some images if you can find any, of Arthur or of some of the radio institutions mentioned. I might also include a "See Also" section, since there are a lot of radio programs and departments mentioned in the articke that many people are probably unfamiliar with. Great job! --Isabellemcelentano (talk) 14:26, 24 October 2014 (UTC)

I would like to assess this article on the new information and sources, as well as additional clean-up, I have added to the page. Specifically, I added the paragraph under "Career," detailing his involvement with Lee de Forest (self-proclaimed "Father of Radio"), linking to de Forest's well-developed Wiki page. I've cited this info using an additional reference, which I added in the bibliography (Early Talk Radio). I also added the paragraph about Batcheller's involvement in the Inter-Company Radio Broadcasting Committee, linking to a number of NYC radio stations and referencing (further adding to the bibliography) a book on radio stations in New York.

Further, I've added "Radio" - a pretty obvious head category - to the "See Also" section at the bottom of the page.

In addition, I've made a few grammatical corrections to the page. For these reasons, I believe this article deserves assessment (and grading). I welcome outside input for further improvement.Jvquid16 (talk) 19:32, 6 November 2014 (UTC)

Additional class comments, Fall 2014

Congratulations on your first article! Great job on the organization and biobox info, plus nice use of advanced reference formatting. I like that the leader section points out nicely his regional and national positions. I believe the Traveling Supervisor of Radio was a national and/or direct presidential appointee position? It would be nice to find a source for that and, if so, note that in the leader. Beyond that, these are the largest issues I see:

• Some possible cut-and-paste from the finding aid. If you are directly cutting and pasting, then use quotation marks. Even better, re-write that info and incorporate it into the article. That's the largest issue I see, and really needs to be addressed.
• It would be great to incorporate one or two more additional sources beyond the finding aid and obituary. For you and future editors I'll just note that there are more sources for his activities in Google Books and Google Scholar. For example, there's more stuff on the free radio school in Boston, his history in NYC, history in regulation. Batcheller was also an early officer of the Institute of Radio Engineers, which became the IEEE -- there are some cites for that in Google Scholar, too.
• Here are a few more tweaks, some are relatively easy to take care of:
  • Linking to other Wikipedia articles is excellent, and part of what makes a good article, but you don't need to link to the article in every occurrence, just the first one. So, for example, you only need to link YMCA to the YMCA article the first time the word YMCA appears.
  • See if there are any applicable categories for this page -- most pages are helped by adding categories at the bottom.
  • Is there a better citation for the obituary -- can we find detailed date and/or page info? I'm going to clean this up a little for you.

Overall, you've done a great job with the page structure and formatting! I think you really only need to address two things, content-wise: clean up the paraphrasing vs. copy-paste, and add one or two more sources. As always, let me know if you need any more help with any of this. AmandaRR123 (talk) 15:50, 28 October 2014 (UTC)