 | Alphington Paper Mill was nominated as a Art and architecture good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (January 4, 2024, reviewed version). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated. |
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 | A fact from Alphington Paper Mill appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 6 October 2023 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
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Did you know nomination edit
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 talk 20:33, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
- ... that an old 16.5ha paper mill, built in 1921, is being redeveloped into 2,500 dwelling and is set to be the 'world's most liveable suburb'? Source: https://www.domain.com.au/sponsor/reimagining-1920s-boiler-house-last-heritage-building-release-yarrabend/
- ALT1: ... that an old 16.5ha paper mill, built in 1921, is being redeveloped into 2,500 dwelling and is set to become the world's first 'Tesla town' with each house containing solar, batteries, and EV chargers? Source: https://www.forbes.com/sites/kristintablang/2016/07/19/tesla-suburb-yarrabend-melbourne-australia/?sh=373f95d7283e
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- Comment: FYI - Uncertain about the first hook as 'world's most liveable suburb', named by 'The Future Lab', may not have been a 100% independent rating.
Created by GMH Melbourne (talk). Self-nominated at 11:18, 18 September 2023 (UTC). Post-promotion hook changes for this nom will be logged at Template talk:Did you know nominations/Alphington Paper Mill; consider watching this nomination, if it is successful, until the hook appears on the Main Page.
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Overall: 
@GMH Melbourne: The info from ALT0 does not currently occur in the article, and with your above comment, I would go for ALT1 instead. However, that hook should be trimmed down a bit, since it exceeds the 200-character limit and is quite a mouthful. Consider the following:
- ALT1a: ... that an old paper mill is being redeveloped into a residential area dubbed "Tesla town"?
Additionally, the distance and colour of the image make the subject hard to discern at 100px. If you really want to have a photo for the hook, you should use that from 2019. Otherwise, I feel like it could be left out entirely. Regards, IceWelder [✉] 10:14, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
- @IceWelder: Thank you very much for taking the time to review, I agree, ALT1a, is much better. Additionally, I am happy to leave out the image. ––– GMH MELBOURNE TALK 11:22, 27 September 2023 (UTC)
GA Review edit
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Reviewer: JML1148 (talk · contribs) 04:18, 4 January 2024 (UTC)
Happy to review this. JML1148 (talk | contribs) 04:18, 4 January 2024 (UTC)
Review edit
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- Spot checks are all good, all sources look reliable, no copyvio or OR issues.
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- See comments below.
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- All good.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- All good.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- All good.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- See comments below.
- Pass/Fail:
Feedback edit
- Quotes need to have the citation that they are from immediately following it. There are two quotes that don't have this.
- Spot checks:
- Source 6 - all good.
- Source 10 - all good.
- Source 4 - all good.
- Source 12 - all good.
- 'floating' might be worth wikilinking.
- Lede could be a bit longer.
Fail justification edit
Mostly, this article is quite good. Very well writtten, no sourcing or copyright issues, good images. But where this article falls short is the length of the article. At 490 words, it is quite small for a good article. Obviously, very short good articles are a thing, but there are major components that the article is missing. There was a very large controversy regarding the demolition of the paper mill, yet it is not mentioned at all in the article. Google 'Alphington Paper Mill' and you will find loads of articles that could easily be incorporated into the article as sources. There is also no detail about any of the history of the mill's operations, bar the short 'Incidents' section. There has to be something interesting that happened in the mill's nearly 100 years of operation that can be sourced and added to the article. This feels like an article that has been rushed to GAN without doing proper research or due diligence before nominating. Before renominating, I would encourage this article to be expanded to be at least 700 words long, ideally 900-1100. JML1148 (talk | contribs) 04:46, 4 January 2024 (UTC)