Talk:A. A. Adams

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammielh (talk · contribs) 14:27, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

I'll pick up this review. Comments below. Sammielh (talk) 14:27, 2 August 2023 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lead and infobox

• I would be inclined to expand the lead slightly – perhaps add in his political party and a sentence about his chiropractic career
• The references shouldn't be needed in the lead
• I don't see where the body specifically says that he supported gun control; you might need to amend the dangerous weapons section to make this clearer
• There seems to be some confusion in the infobox on his districts – per source [1], he represented the 26th district from 1969 to 1973, alongside Thomas A. Swayze Jr., preceded by Homer Humiston and succeeded by Clifford W. Beck; he represented the 27th district from 1973 to 1981, alongside R. Lorraine Wojahn and James E. Salatino, preceded by Frank Marzano and succeeded by Art Wang

Early life, career, personal life

• WP:GEOCOMMA is missing after Washington in Bellingham, Washington,
• (Optional) Might be worth putting that Palmer College is in Davenport, Iowa as I assumed it would be in Washington
• I can't see where the source gives his full date of birth
• I would be inclined to specify he moved to Tacoma, Washington,
• This isn't a requirement for GA but as a note, there appears to be some details in the sources which might be beneficial in the article: source [4] indicates that he graduated from university in 1924 and gives more detail about his service with the Washington Chiropractors Association (check spelling in the article)
• I would make the entire chiropractic section one paragraph, it breaks strangely in two paragraphs
• Link Democrat
• I believe all of the election results (e.g. 52-48) should have an en dash instead of a hyphen
• Is there any detail about why the dangerous weapons bill was originally contested?
• There should be a comma after "In 1972"
• I would link redistricting
• I don't see where the sources specifically say that he moved to the 27th district because of redistricting
• "he won election for his fifth term"
• I would avoid starting three paragraphs with "In [year]"
• "He supported decriminalization again" I would specify of marijuana
• Marijuana legalization is linked in the lead but not the body
• There is discrepancy between cosponsor and co-sponsor
• I don't see where the source says that the state lottery bill did not pass
• I would avoid using GOP in the last paragraph of career as this may not be a term understood by international readers without any explanation
• Capitalise Republican
• "Mildred S. Adams (1899–1993)"
• The personal life section doesn't flow very well but I'm not sure how well that can be amended
• Is there a reason only one election is in the electoral history section?

General

• Earwig came back clear and I wasn't able to find any close paraphrasing or source issues other than that noted above from spot checks
• There are no image issues although I would change the link on the Commons page to point to the image itself

ThadeusOfNazereth comments

• Logging that I have seen this and will try and get these implemented this week, but I'm in the middle of a major cross-country move so it might be later. Thank you for the detailed feedback! ThadeusOfNazereth(he/him)^{Talk to Me!} 15:55, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
• @Sammielh: Thank you again! I believe I've implemented all of those fixes. On the personal life section, I agree that it doesn't flow well but I also agree that there's nothing really to be done about it. I tried to keep it to only the most relevant items. On the electoral history point, I included the first election because it seemed the most notable. The problem with those boxes is that they stack on top of each other, so if I were to include all of them the page would get really long vertically. ThadeusOfNazereth(he/him)^{Talk to Me!} 02:14, 3 August 2023 (UTC)
  • @ThadeusOfNazereth: This looks good. I've made one small edit to the article but otherwise I'm happy to promote this to GA. Good work on this article! Sammielh (talk) 11:13, 4 August 2023 (UTC)