Talk:1912 Giro d'Italia

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Zwerg Nase in topic GA Review

Translation edit

I can see that this was translated from a different language, probably Italian;) It needs some grammar fixes. --EdgeNavidad (talk) 08:31, 27 July 2009 (UTC)Reply

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:1912 Giro d'Italia/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Zwerg Nase (talk · contribs) 11:11, 5 August 2016 (UTC)Reply


I will review this. Zwerg Nase (talk) 11:11, 5 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Changes from...

  • "In response to the..." - in response to what?
Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 05:15, 11 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • "...how the new points system operated"
Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 05:15, 11 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • In the last sentence of this paragraph, change the tense into Conditional "would they know", also stage instead of state
Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 05:15, 11 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

Race overview

  • No need to repeat ref #7 three times over, the one at the end is enough.
I prefer to cite after each sentence for better recall when looking at the article after a long hiatus. Disc Wheel (T + C) 05:15, 11 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • And the end of the first paragraph: "...Carlo Galetti finishing third, ..."
Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 05:15, 11 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Second paragraph: "By the time" - it is unclear what time is meant.
Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 05:15, 11 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • Fourth paragraph: "...start of the sixth stage at 6:40 local time".
Fixed. Disc Wheel (T + C) 05:15, 11 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

References

  • Note 1 should cite a source, right now, I cannot see where you take the information from which stages contained mountains. This should not be OR.
I took it from the Bike Race info source that mentions each mountain if there was one, I cited it in the table title instead. Disc Wheel (T + C) 05:15, 11 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

I'll place the article on hold for 7 days. Good work so far! Zwerg Nase (talk) 21:53, 9 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

Fixed everything, this article was a pain to write, hardly any info out there. Disc Wheel (T + C) 05:16, 11 August 2016 (UTC)Reply
@Disc Wheel: Sorry, it completely went past me that you had taken care of this already. Passed now, good job! Zwerg Nase (talk) 15:27, 15 August 2016 (UTC)Reply