Sweet Creature edit
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I've listed this article for peer review because this recently got promoted to a GA, and I would like to take it to FAC. Although this article is about a non-single song, I think the coverage is comprehensive for an album track. I'd appreciate any comments on prose, references, and manual of style, that could likely help this article become a FA. Thanks, Viridian Bovary (talk) 06:47, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
Comments from Aoba47 edit
I did the GAN review for the article. I do not have much to add, and I think a more outside opinion and review would be more beneficial. I would encourage you to reach out to editors who have worked on music articles, particularly those experienced with FACs. My suggestions are below:
- In the caption for File:Kid Harpoon Glasto07.jpg, I would add the year that the photo was taken for context.
- done
- For this part,
four new songs written and performed by him,
I would say "recorded by" instead of "performed by". I associate "performed" more with a live performance context and I think "recorded" is a little more accurate for this part as I believe you are more so talking about the song being recorded in a studio.
- agreed, done
- For this part,
"country-indebted Laurel Canyon sound"
, I would link Laurel Canyon.
- added
- For this part,
a "modern-day take" on the mentioned song
, I would clarify what you mean by "the mentioned song" as it is not immediately clear in the prose.
- revised
I think the article is in very good shape, but I would encourage you to leave the peer review up to get further feedback. I hope my very brief comments are helpful. Have a great rest of your weekend! Aoba47 (talk) 23:08, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
- Thank you for the comments, Aoba47. I have implemented them on the article. --Viridian Bovary (talk) 05:21, 31 August 2021 (UTC)