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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to see this article get to featured status before the 40th anniversary of the book's publication in 2009. This article has gone through an extensive rewrite and expansion. It has been through a FAC before, but it was recommended that after some more work, that it go through a peer review. I believe that this article needs a thorough copyediting more than anything else, and I'd appreciate the input for its improvement.

Thanks, --Figureskatingfan (talk) 04:44, 7 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment The prose is not yet at a professional level. If I have time over the weekend, I'll try to help out. Calliopejen1 (talk) 20:18, 9 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - As one of the initial FAC reviewers, I am extremely impressed with how much this article has improved. I agree with the Figureskatingfan's assessment, though, that a thorough copyedit is needed. I would recommend Dank55. Awadewit (talk) 22:02, 13 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, A. I have worked very hard on it. I think I've added everything the initial FAC reviewers asked for, and then some. Thanks for the kind words, and for the recommendation. I've asked for his help as you suggest. --Figureskatingfan (talk) 00:36, 14 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

And he turned me down! Too busy. So I'm still waiting for some help. Anyone? ;) --Figureskatingfan (talk) 03:46, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Try Scartol. He's a little busy right now with an FAC, but if you don't mind waiting a week or two.... :) I would love to help, but I'm in the middle of two peer reviews myself, plus lots of off-wiki stuff. However, if we can't find anyone else, I'll see what I can do. Awadewit (talk) 16:57, 15 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Done, and thanks again. --Figureskatingfan (talk) 04:50, 16 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Very briefly, here are some suggestions for improvement. If you want more comments, please ask here.

Do the titles of the other five volumes need to be in the lead? Is the fourth paragraph needed - could the sentence I Know Why the Caged Bird Sings is the first in a six-volume autobiographical series, covering Angelou's childhood and young adult experiences. just be part of the third paragraph?

Done as suggested.

Per WP:MOSQUOTE the poem needs a ref in The title of the book comes from the third stanza of the poem "Sympathy", by Paul Laurence Dunbar: ... My rule of thumb is that every quote, every statistic, every extraordinary claim and every paragraph needs a ref.

Done! --Figureskatingfan (talk) 14:57, 17 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It seems to me that this article needs a photo of Maya Angelou - it is about her and her autobiography after all.

Added the book cover illustration of the paperback version. If it's not acceptable, I'll replace it. It's too bad there's no free image of Dr. Angelou when she wrote the book.

I think the film version should make it clear in the first sentence that it was a made for TV movie (not a "theatrical release")

Done, clarified.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 04:45, 17 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]

It helps a lot! Thanks. --Figureskatingfan (talk) 15:49, 17 October 2008 (UTC)[reply]