Comments picky as ever...
- "They... Their... They..." reads a little dull.
- "Since then, the team has played regularly in One Day Internationals (ODI). The introduction of Twenty20 cricket in the early part of the 21st century has all but eliminated Test cricket from the woman's game.[2]" these two sentences feel a little odd together. Maybe there's a way to re-phrase it?
- Presumably, the main oddity is the jump from talking about ODI cricket to talking about Tests and T20? I was trying to follow a mostly chronological line, but I can try changing things a bit if you think it would help? Harrias talk 16:13, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- "South Africa have only played four different sides in women's Test cricket, with their most frequent opponent being England, against whom South Africa have contested six Tests" a touch clumsy for me, maybe something like "South Africa have played four different sides in women's Test cricket, with England their most frequent opponent, having faced them in six Tests"? Not sure, just feels like the sentence there right now is a little too much "follow-on...".
- "In women's Twenty20 Internationals" - use the abbreviation you've already introduced.
- "They have recorded the most victories..." last team mentioned was West Indies...
- Tweaked, though now there seems a lot of repetition of "South Africa."
- In the Key, last five items need an en-dash, not a hyphen.
- You have a W%, D% and L% for Tests, but just a W% for the other two. You have a Tie and some NRs, so maybe worth considering additional columns for consistency.
- The source does not include the additional information, so it would sort of be OR (though in reality, it would simply be maths). Irrespective of that, the W% counts a tie as half a win, and disregards NRs, so assuming that a L% in one-day cricket would also count a tie as half, the L% would simply be 100 minus the W%, which I personally think would be redundant. Harrias talk 16:13, 9 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The Rambling Man (talk) 17:43, 8 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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