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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was not promoted by User:GimmeBot 03:25, 5 August 2008 [1].

List of provinces of Iran edit

I am nominating this list as there is no doubt over the items in the list, It has a good lead and references. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Ardeshire Babakan (talk • contribs)

Comments

  • "See Also" goes before "References"-Done
  • "a List of " – "a list of " Changed first sentence. see later
  • "in 2004 when" – unlink the yearunlinked all years and dates

Gary King (talk) 20:12, 23 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comments
    • I suspect the "Provinces" in the title shouldn't be capitalised.Moved article
    • "This is a List of Provinces of Iran." - boring, try something which captures the imagination of the reader.changed first sentence. I hope this is what you had in mind
    • Pick one version of English - you have centre (Brit Eng) and reorganized (US/Canadian(?)) Eng. I'd go for Brit Eng.changed this but haven't checked it for similar mistakes
    • Move [1] to the end of the sentence.Done
    • I'd look for some decent links for things like Minister of the Interior.If you meant external links i've made a link to the interior ministry website and the Provincial governments of all 30 provinces
    • "one by one" - hyphenate or rephrase.got rid of sentence
    • Don't link individual years.all dates have been unlinked
    • Remove the space between the full stop and [3].Done
    • Sort out whether this is the definitive list or Provinces of Iran is the article. There shouldn't be two articles like this.
    • What are "Shahrestans"?linked shahrestans to relevant page and put a (counties) next to it
    • Notes/Map shouldn't be sortable.Done
    • All the notes should be referenced.All notes have been referenced
    • Labeled Map should be Labeled map and probably ought to be in the lead.Moved it up above lead and changed title
    • This list must be categorised.Done by the kind User:Khoikhoi
  • The Rambling Man (talk) 20:14, 23 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I am not sure that bolding the entry for Iran at the bottom of the table is distinctive enough. Could we change the entry to Iran (total) or some such? Rmhermen (talk) 20:59, 25 July 2008 (UTC)fine. consider it done![reply]

Comments

  • "Iran is subdivided into thirty provinces , each governed from a local centre" is subdivided correct here, or should it be simply divided? There's a stray space before the comma, too.Done
  • "each governed from a local centre, usually the largest local city," -- local is used twice in quick succession. Can this part of the sentence be recast at all?Done. removed the "local city" so it's just "city".
  • Does each province have a "cabinet", or is there only one for the entire nation? It's unclear.
  • Perhaps you could say where Iran is? Either "Asia" or "Middle East"mentioned ME
  • The Lede map is rather redundant when compared to the labelled map. May I suggest removing the one in the Lede, and putting the labelled one in its placelabeled map is now in lead
    • What do you think about this now? For me, the transcluded labeled map is too big and squashes the prose too much. It may be better to leave the image after the prose (I still think only this map is needed though, and to still not bother with the little green one that was there before). It's up to you, after all, these are only suggestions and not commands.. Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 06:42, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Lede provides a decent overview of what the provinces are, how they're governed, etc, but I'd like to see another paragraph describing some of them and introducing the contents of the table. Which is the largest province by area? By population? Smallest? Etc, etc.put some stats in. might put a bit of history tomorrow
  • Also use the Lede to describe what the "Shahrestans" is. For users without popups, or reading a printed version, its unclear that this simply means counties.At the top of the table shahrestans have been described as counties. I checked out the printable version tool and it seemed fine . I( shall mention that the provinces are later devided into shahrestans(counties) tomorrow
  • In the table, you should convert the metric units for American readers, using the {{convert}} template.Thanx 4 the tip! they have now been converted. however, there seems to be a glitch in the sorting button as 3 digited population densities seem to be counted as 2 digited numbers
  • "Area(km²)" needs a space before the opening parenthesisremoved km2 as conversion template shows units
  • Navboxes should appear at the very end of the article, per WP:LAYOUTDone
  • I think all those External links for the Government offices should instead be used as references for each province

Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 07:18, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • Closing note - I've closed this FLC as it's becoming a peer review and, even after more than ten days, the list is full of breaches of WP:MOS and errors. Please seek a peer review and then resubmit the list at FLC when you've dealt with the comments from there. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:16, 4 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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