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List of international goals scored by Manon Melis edit

List of international goals scored by Manon Melis (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): Edwininlondon (talk) 19:20, 9 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Having nominated the list of goals scored by Vivianne Miedema, all-time goal scorer for the Dutch football team, it seemed fair to work on the list of her predecessor, Manon Melis. I have applied all the comments reviewers kindly provided in the Miedema nonimation to this Melis list article. I believe it is ready. I look forward to your comments. Edwininlondon (talk) 19:20, 9 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments
  • "She helped the Dutch qualify for their first major finals ever" - lose the unnecessary word "ever"
  • "Her last goal, her 59th, she scored in" => "She scored her last goal, her 59th, in"
  • " in and against Albania in 2013" - simpler and more elegant to just say "away to Albania"
  • "Serbia and Switzerland are the teams against whom" => "Serbia and Switzerland are the teams against which"
  • "Her most productive year was 2011. She ended that year with 10 goals from 12 games." - can you merge these two very short sentences together?
  • "Four of her goals came from penalties." - placed where this is, there's the slight possibility of confusion as people may think it means four of her goals in 2011 were pens. Can this be reworded or moved somewhere else?
  • Think that's it from me -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 19:43, 10 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
    Thanks very much for taking the time to review. I think I have address all your points. Edwininlondon (talk) 21:52, 11 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 17:25, 12 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from ~ HAL333 21:48, 4 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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  • Could you center the refs?
  • What is the source for the "Goals by competition" table?

That's all. ~ HAL333 16:02, 18 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • Thanks for reviewing. It took a while but I managed to centre the refs, and I learned something new about tables, so thank you. The source for that by competition table is me counting the entries in the main table. I assume that is allowed, as the competitions themselves are verifiable in each source. Or am I mistaken? Edwininlondon (talk) 21:38, 19 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Happy to support this nomination. ~ HAL333 21:48, 4 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Comments

Nice work Edwininlondon. A few comments for improving readability:

  1. "Hers was the only Dutch goal in a 4–1 defeat." Consider changing to "She scored the only Dutch goal in the 4–1 loss." or "Hers was the only Dutch goal in the 4–1 loss."
  2. "She also scored a hat-trick in a FIFA World Cup qualifier match away to Albania in 2013." Consider editing to something like "In September 2013, she scored a hat-trick against Albania during 2015 FIFA Women's World Cup qualification."
  3. "Melis played her only matches at a FIFA World Cup finals in 2015, in Canada." I read this as she played in the Final, but the Netherlands was not in the 2015 FIFA Women's World Cup Final... Being that this article is about her international goals scored, it seems the following sentences are not needed in the lead: "Melis played her only matches at a FIFA World Cup finals in 2015, in Canada. In her four games she did not score; the Dutch were defeated by finalists Japan in the round of 16."
  4. Should the sentences starting with "Serbia and Switzerland are the teams against which she has scored the most" be in a new paragraph?
  5. The alt tags on the images could be more specific to include "Photo of Dutch international footballer Manon Melis...." instead of "woman". See the Elizabeth II example at WP:MOSALT.

Hmlarson (talk) 04:53, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • Thanks very much for your review. I believe I have addressed all your points. Edwininlondon (talk) 22:48, 25 January 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Comments

A few very minor points, but that's about it. Nice work. Kosack (talk) 08:34, 7 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • Thanks very much for your review, Kosack. I believe I have addressed the minor points you raised. Edwininlondon (talk) 17:34, 8 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Source review passed (and thanks for adding trans-titles!); promoting. --PresN 02:46, 1 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

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