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The list was promoted by Giants2008 via FACBot (talk) 00:32, 18 September 2017 (UTC) [1].[reply]

List of international goals scored by Clint Dempsey edit

List of international goals scored by Clint Dempsey (edit | talk | history | protect | delete | links | watch | logs | views)

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Nominator(s): SounderBruce 00:41, 27 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Clint Dempsey recently tied the goalscoring record for the United States, set by Landon Donovan (the subject of my sole featured list), so it was finally time to create this list. Dempsey has scored some important goals for the United States in a variety of competitions, including World Cups and their famous run to the Confederation Cup final in 2009, and this list covers them all. (Note that Dempsey could become the all-time scorer anytime between today and the 2018 World Cup). SounderBruce 00:41, 27 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • Maybe personal pref, but I would prefer "who has represented the..." instead of "who has played for the"...
  • " among active male goalscorers" -> " among active international male goalscorers"
  • "behind Cristiano Ronaldo (75) and Lionel Messi (58)." perhaps say "Portugal's ... and Argentina's..."
  • You could link "assist".
  • "three goals against Egypt, Spain, and Brazil " potentially confusing, I guess you mean one goal against each of those teams?
  • A bit of overlinking in the lead, 2015 CONCACAF, friendly etc.
  • Not sure why you need a full stop after every number in the No. list.
  • You have two July 22 "as ofs" and two July 28 "as ofs", suggest it would be neater for them all to be the same.

That's all I have right now, nice list. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:51, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: All fully or partially done. SounderBruce 19:56, 3 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
@The Rambling Man: Any more comments? SounderBruce 00:34, 11 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Resolved comments from Liam E. Bekker (talk) 18:50, 16 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Comments by Liam E. Bekker

Great work on this list. I've not picked up any structural issues but there are one or two small changes that need to be made:

  • There seem to be a lot of consecutive sentences starting with "Dempsey....", try and tweak this a bit to help flow.
  • In Paragraph 3, the word "coming" can be removed.
  • In respect of the summary at the bottom of the led it was recently pointed out to me here that comparative figures should all either be figures or words as per WP:NUMNOTES.

That's it from my side. Cheers, Liam E. Bekker (talk) 11:38, 16 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Liam E. Bekker: Thanks for pointing out the repetitive use; I also managed to clear up some typos (which added more "Dempsey..." sentences). Removed the word "coming" and fixed the figures. SounderBruce 15:16, 16 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support - the few concerns I had were addressed very quickly. This is a quality list and I'm more than satisfied for it to pass. Liam E. Bekker (talk) 18:50, 16 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Comments Support --Cheetah (talk) 20:01, 14 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    • Why do you use "As of July 28, 2017"? I mean why that date? The USMNT did not have a game on that day. I'd suggest use the date when USMNT last played (September 5, 2017).
    • The lead states 137 appearances, but the tables below state 138. Why the difference? Also, in the "By competition" table, I add all the caps and get 134 appearances, not 138 as you have it there.
    • "On June 22, 2017, during a 2017 CONCACAF Gold Cup semifinal against Costa Rica..." - The game was in July
    • 99% of readers know that "No." means "number". I'd suggest changing "number" to "Cumulative goals total" in the "abbr" template.
    • Since you're linking the word "cap" in the table, I can't see the "A cap is awarded to a player for an international appearance" part when I hover over that link. Either remove the explanation or the link.

--Cheetah (talk) 18:11, 14 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • @Crzycheetah: Fixed the caps and date errors (now pegged to September 5's game, which conveniently had game notes with updated cap information). Also fixed the hover abbreviations as you suggested. SounderBruce 19:36, 14 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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